Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by ThomasP3 04-18-2008 15:22,   ... Very good story Sir. The mast sentance of the first paragraph may be able to be broken down into two, or maybe made shorter. The length of it took some of the dramatic effect away from me. If it was more powerful, it might really drive the story home. Very good reading though! I enjoyed it thoroughly.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story