Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by CELL 04-17-2008 07:47,   ... You changed tenses in the first stanza; should have kept it all in the present (i.e. "If you really loved me, you'd put that bullet through my chest." would have worked better if it were, "If you really love me, you'll put that bullet through my chest.")    Also you're overusing the words, "my love." It's almost exhausting.     I'll read the rest of your stuff though.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story