Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by CELL 04-14-2008 12:44,   ... This is good. I like how the narrating is more in touch with Derek's personality.     Your characters and story seem fuller (i.e. the readers are learning more about how each character functions).    I'm quite submerged.    Again, can't wait for the next.    *Small thing: I do like "Far Out" more than "Youtopia"... if you want to 'improve' (though you're doing great) try to notice what "Far Out" has that "Youtopia" doesn't. Of course don't make them the same, that'd be redundant, but you know...    Adieu.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story