Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Megumi 04-10-2008 06:47,   "pretty amazing"^^ Loved your style in general.     Twas almost exactly what I was looking for in a story; thirst has been quenched.     Because you were able to describe the narrator/protagonist's observations so well I found the whole thing to be a bit enthralling actually... I had no problem reading this more than once.    Some of my favorite excerpts:     "hot tongue play with her plum-purple bubblegum"    "the girl bashfully flicks aside a chemically-altered bang and half-skips to the counter, cream in hand"    Your narrator and main character are the same person, but their intellect contrasts at times... only a few times! No worries.    Stick to what you do best when writing the following chapters: descriptive images; which I found to be quirky^^. I love that. I enjoyed the rest more than the dialog and that's a rarity for me. But the dialog was just a great, and funny by the way (i.e “'Lots of men with your...condition...buy that product...'")    I look forward to anything else you have coming.    ^^Yay!   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story