Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Roadkill315 04-06-2008 11:49,   ... Overall, better that the first draft indeed in terms of story telling. I must say, the first senatnce was a drag... look at how many times you used the word 'and'... here and throughout some attention to sentence structure needed.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story