Birth of the White Buffalo The bell hanging from the handle of the door... Last Christmas Christmas was going to come early this year and...

Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Roadkill315 04-02-2008 10:46,   ... A good reality check story; which means I would have gone with the Ruger .44 myself :-)    Seriously, the first six paragraphs were very well laid out, each adding a layer to the visual of the character and his plight. Then you defined Penny before firing a blank at her, "This is all your fault"... my favorite line of the story.    And how messed up am I, when Penny shot the other teller, I was cracking up!    Then I stopped laughing when the gurad did her in, that was the reality of the reality check. Good ending, and a great story. Minor minor afterthought, not sure the last paragraph, "The entire bank ..." neded to be written. My readers mind had already lived the description.    Thanks!   » Report this comment to administrator »    »  Go back to the story