Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Rover 03-29-2008 06:23,   ... The atmosphere seems so peaceful, except in the second part with the water...IMHO, the feeling of panick doesn't really work. I don't know, you could have changed the rythm or something else to suggest that the narrator was really scared?  But you did a very good job with the imagery, and the symbolism of all the elements presented in your story :)   » Report this comment to administrator »    »  Go back to the story