Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Tarhead Mugwump 03-25-2008 21:44,   i tried but i couldn't find a rhythm in this. which, many will tell you - doesn't really mean anything in the real world.    i found myself parsing it, and writing it differently - it seems like it wobbles a bit.    don't get me wrong, i really liked reading it - some of the lines would be great alone on a page, if they were all there was to read. there are parts that are really stirring, a good transfer of energy.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story