Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by darknstormy 03-25-2008 05:28,   ... On the whole OK but as the others said, the relationship between the characters was pretty obvious. I too kept on reading and the final paragraphs were worth it but could have done with some editing. I think leaving out the last sentence makes the former two more powerful.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story