Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Howler 03-20-2008 21:02,   ... Hi! its a good story with a good buildup. But you could focus a bit on the ending... it does fizz out a wee bit. Dialog's good, very realistic and so's the flow. Just focus a bit on the ending n you'll end up with a kickass story :) On the whole, a very good job :)   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story