Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by cookingWine 03-17-2008 21:24,   ... That was very well done.  A terrifying line, whether you meant it to be or not, "Now, how can I get that back?"  This is the kind of thing I was advocated you to do more and it's very nice to see it. I did the literary double-take on that line.    Do you know how creepy that is??? How inevitable and wrong you make it seem, in suggesting that it's really a trivial thing? Something that would be said in joke, and it's taken to seriousness and is ridiculously deep and concise.    The ending was almost very good. "I couldn’t bear to see her body." I think you know what I'm going to say here, since I've been harping it with most of your work, but we know she's dead! Stop telling me!  The line about getting into the car and driving off, without explaining anything else, is where that ends for me without problems.  I think you should make a commitment to yourself, when you write, to either not explain anything, or explain every little thing, because when you do both, it confuses me and detaches me fr   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story