Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by gsaracen 03-15-2008 17:52,   try... try more rythm....try counting syllables. also read it to yourself and see if the rythm sounds right...or nice...or expressive in some way.    Sometimes rythm can be inspired by music that really moves you. Not too directly though.    Also try and use non-standard sentence forms (that are still grammatically acceptable, for example archaic word ordering....that sound a bit old fashioned...but help with rythm and rhyme....)    try and be less literal, .... use a bit of synesthesia when you want. Making something sound dreamy or poetic is not pretencious!    Also... erm... what else.... try sperating into smaller units... stanzas.... and...   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story