Her Magic Touch, Chapter 4 Remember the stunning blond that was offered a lap on... The Lottery This is the story about Jack and Neal Who shook...

Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by R.E.Potter 02-29-2008 02:13,   ,,, Not taken it as abrasive. Constuctive critisism. But I still fail to see any action in the 1st,2nd,or third paragraphs, unless 'coming out of his self induced trance' is action as you see it. I admit some lines could be re-done and perhaps I'll edit them in and out one day. Thanks for taking time to read, it shows im not wasting my time writing them.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story