Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by cookingWine 02-26-2008 21:10,   ... Hands down, one of the best opening lines to a story I've ever heard. Seriously. The character is established perfectly, and there is also immediate tension (ie, I wonder what's the apology going to be for?). When I read that, I was actually grinning.  And after you give the best, "show, don't tell" line, the rest of it dwindles into telling and loses my attention. So close, so close.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story