Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Pez 02-18-2008 07:06,   ... This was a good read, but I would suggest you tell us what "war" you're making reference to; I really couldn't tell (they just all have so much in common). If it wasn't based on a historical one, then a made up one would of done just fine... some names (the countries involved, rulers maybe, etc).    I've read some of your other stories, and have noticed your description of things and events has improved, but there's still room for some more improvement. Try to have them flow a little nicer...    There were times when I felt I was there in the battlefield, but others where you lost me, so a little more consistency would be good.    I liked this one more towards the ending; do you think there is some symbolism involved when Marie remove her battle gear? Maybe, that she was simple not fit to wear them...(?)   » Report this comment to administrator »    »  Go back to the story