Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Pez 01-24-2008 07:23,   Oh, I forgot. Just one small suggestion: I would of not included that last line, 'I lay awake unfeeling'... it sort of took something away from your poem. The second to last line would of done it just fine. Other than that, very good!   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story