Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Roadkill315 01-11-2008 10:10,   ... Great writing, loved the descriptiveness of the setting. Didn't seem like a place I want to find myself any time soon.     As for plot, it seemed to stop just short here. You built up a climax and it ended in a good way with the dark character returning her cell phone. A good ending. Alternatively, as soon as he was gone immediately hitting her with another final/major climax that didn't end so well may work well here, especially for a story tagged as a horror piece.     But then, in reading your final sentence, "Someone was up there watching out for me", this was your intended moral of the story which required a good ending.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story