Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by futurewriter 01-06-2008 16:03,   ... Great story! Well written and tight. only a couple of suggestions though. The sentence in the second paragraph 'His boss was counting on him.' could be left out. the next sentence does the job. I don't know if this could be considered horror, more like suspense. You have a great descriptive style. When Father and son locked eyes with the realization of how stupid they had been, that was an amazing end.  Fantastic story!  Keep on writing.  sincerely,  IGWooten   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story