Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Zombie Punk 08-14-2008 00:12,   Mirror, Mirror, Chapter 1 I think this was a good way to begin your story. It gripped me from the very beginning and now I want to read more -- which I will.    Two things I want to point out that I really liked.    "She found him rummaging though a pile of books at a nearby stall and tugged his arm in her excitement, causing a shower of literature on to the grass"    I just thought that was such a cool way to describe that. "A shower of literature". That really impressed me, for I have never heard that saying before.    "They stood there for what seemed like an age, like gunfighters each waiting for the other to make the first move"    such a great way to describe that scenerio, it painted a clear picture in my head, although i think gunslinger would be a better subsitute for gunfighter, but gunfighter is perfectly fine.    I'm hooked.    Cheers,    Max   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story