Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by cookingWine 07-20-2008 19:44,   ... I think this is a step up from the first chapter in a few ways, or at least, a step in a different direction.  Either way, a good one.  I'd be wary of getting into the novel idea of a story. This doesn't have the making of a novel so far, too quickly developing.  Keep it at this pace, actionwise, and I think you'll be set.  I like where it's going and I'll keep up with it, as long as you keep up the strong word choice and the solid story building.  Keep on.  -CS   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story