Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by elenalda 07-01-2008 12:55,   ... I don't really see this as an homage--your "twist" is Palahniuk's twist. Your style is Palahniuk's style--the long sections of technical explanation followed by a pithy summary ("These can later be gradually released for excretion. Piss them out or shit them out."). I don't see much that's original in here, and it detracts from the story. I picked up on the Palahniuk right away, so I knew exactly what the twist was.     Palahniuk wrote a set of writing tips a while ago, and the one I remember was "Surprise yourself"--that it's not enough to surprise your audience with a twist, that you should be surprised as well. Keep that in mind should you choose to edit this--ask if you're surprised when a Palahniuk homage ends the same way that "Fight Club" ends. I think you could do better.    (Oh, and thanks for trying to read my story. I don't know why ads are eating it, but it shows up fine for me. I'll see what I can do.)   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story