Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Dirkin 06-24-2008 22:54,   ... Very good! You have created a sense of tension in this story, the behaviour of the driver hints at whats to come, and leaves it to the imagination. The yuppie's behaviour seemed authentic: he was an asshole. I would like to suggest that you consider changing the fact that the narrator sees the monster, so that he sees people running and screaming and starts running himself out of instinct, hearing the sounds of whatever it was tearing people up but not seeing it. I say this because sometimes its what you dont see that is scarier than what you do. Good work!   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story