Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by D.A. Ross 06-24-2008 22:36,   Needs work You have some grammar issues to contend to.    ???    "But the here pedestrians."- Word order?    "Kept moving they way New Yorkers" - Should be the, right!     A lot of missing comma's    "I was able to get closer look." - missing a    It seems like you may have hurried with your writing or not proof read it checking for errors.    The story was interesting though, slow at first but it picked up at the end. Would have liked to read closure on the monster though.    Just an observation.    TY   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story