Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by Zombie Punk 06-17-2008 09:30,   Hmmm... has some protential. Looks pretty promising, I'd say. You need to edit really bad, though. Just how the words look. Like the changing of the font size and being highlighted. also at the top of the third paragraph I didnt get the word 'toy' was there for?    Kinda dragged on a little bit, but all stories do that I suppose. I wonder If this Mr. Bart killed her brother? hmm...guess I'll have to read on to find out, eh? And read on I shall, but not right now. I'm off to do some writing of my own.    Cheerio   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story