Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by cookingWine 06-12-2008 14:48,   ... My only real complaint is sticking to the tunes that I've already been humming. This isn't the kind of thing that is typically up my alley, but it's not bad. The character is getting a little more dimensional, but it's going to be hard getting there without slowing down the action.  The way I like to think about it is when you're sprinting, you can't really gauge how fast other people are going. But if you stop and look at them then, it's much easier to figure out their speed.  I think the only thing I would ask is that, at some point in the series (earlier, rather than later for the sake of attachment and tension), we slow down so there is a chance at getting to know the character instead of sprinting with him. I hope that makes sense. I'm not quite connected to him yet.  As far as structure and mechanics, it's fine. There were a few problems but they were really minor and insignificant.  Sorry it took so long for me to get to part 3. This series takes a commitment.  Keep on.  -CS.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story