Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by futurewriter 06-10-2008 12:01,   Parapraxis Hmmmm. This may be just my opinion but the character seems to be out of sync. She is so against Rob's musings about human nature and then turns into a fanatical killing machine. I loved the ending, but maybe if there was a little more provocation on Rob's part, so that the main character is really defending herself, it would be more believable. There were a few grammatical errors that a good edit could fix. All in all a great hook that kept me reading. But I was disappointed in the way the main character responded in the end.  Keep on writing!   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story