Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by cookingWine 06-07-2008 14:15,   ... It's too slow for me, in this part. I mean, all the pieces are there. This is more of a preferential argument rather than something technical or constructive.  I am one that does not typically tread in the sci-fi shelf, because, frankly, surreal doesn't really interest me.    All I can really comment on is the character again. He seems flat to me. He's going through a growing experience, but it seems to be secondary to the description about how he gets there. I almost feel like the main character is the mental evolution of our protagonist instead of the protagonist, and that disinterests me.    I've always walked this weird line of how much action is too much action, and how much description is too much description. And for me, here, I didn't really get enough of either. It seemed to be a release of concepts more than a story.    I'll be to part three soon. Pretty good job on the suspense, although, for an alliance of extraordinary individuals, you'd think they'd be smart enough to kill him   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story