Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by lemon 06-04-2008 19:07,   ... In all honesty, I think there's just too much information in a chapter of this size. You had the right idea by describing everything in detail, but I think sometimes less is more. The storyline kind of gets lost within the descriptions. I'm not saying its bad, it just needs some editing. just my opinion :)   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story