Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by JJtyler 05-31-2008 20:20,   Chapter 3 This needs work.    "..." should is being used way too much, mostly to separate lines of dialog from the characters, when a period would do.     Keep writing and reading. The more you read, the more you will know how to build a story and stay away from cliche's like "quick as a cat".   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story