Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by whitj310 05-31-2008 12:00,   Vanity My God, it's like you were describing my youth!  Seriously though, it was well written and poorly written. Content, plot characterizations, are excellent. But spelling, syntax need work. Just proof read a bit before publishing. i.e.: per say should be per se.  and too many cliches like "good smack upside his head."  Good blend of different writing styles.  Feels like a book, maybe by Dean Koontz. This story alone could be three chapters.  JJ the WATCHER heh heh heh heh heh heh... he cuckled maniacally   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story