The exotic tales of a pink skunk and a cucumber, Chapter 76 The stormy night made the skunk restless and... Marks Trilogy Part 1 - A Secret Life The smell was almost overpowering and it hit them...

Report a comment Thank you for taking the time to report the following comment to the administrator of this site. Please complete this short form and click the submit button to process your report. Name   E-mail   Reason for reporting comment       Comment in question Posted by cookingWine 05-06-2008 13:43,   ... Eh. I have a problem with suicide stories because I always feel jipped out of an ending.  The characters were rigid. The only choice during the whole story was that she put up with him instead of killing herself. Creating choices is what creates tension, and ultimately, the desire to read.    Besides from the negative, the sentences were put together well and it was a smooth read. I'd work on the ability to create a story with many dynamics, maybe too many to start so you can get the idea.    Keep on keeping on.  CS.   » Report this comment to administrator   »  Go back to the story