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Can anyone correct my short review? 4 Months, 2 Weeks ago  
Hi, I am not native and i know i have made mistakes in my writing. If u have some time to correct it, i would be grateful. I need it to my lesson.

There are a lot of stories in the internet, but usually old. I tried to find something new and I think, I have succeeded. Brand new story from this year. My goal was finding short story funny and easy to take the bait. It is from literary forum when people hooked up by writing gather and share their invention. The author of this story in a normal citizen who uploaded it to the site storiesville.com. I was one of many who enjoyed the story. People share with others their writings and users can score stories. This one which I have chosen was quite high marked. I am not keen on reading so it have been my first time exactly looking for stories in the net. The story I have found is about an old man, who can not admit, that his best time of life passed.

I will make the story closer to you. First of all it is easy to read what I like the most. Huge of dialogs makes it vivid and really grips. It is without a literal description of nature or persons. The story is simply moving to the point. I believe you know what I mean. Only specific facts. People in University of technology appreciate extracts, so short specific stories are for me.

What is it about? So it is about an old man, elder funny guy. His is against his son and don’t want to listen to him. He behaves like a stubborn child- everything what his son had said, he takes up side down. Old man has hard time living on his own. His best son proposes him moving to a nursing home, but he is a proud man, proud of his freedom so you can figured out his reaction. He decided to show ungrateful son that his is able to interact in the society. After an argument his first thought was- have a beer and get to know some people. For us in nothing special, but for an old man it is kind of ordeal. During his way to the bar he meets few people and tries to talk with them with better or worse results. It is shown that his questions and answers mostly do not fit to the conversation. Funny guy. His thinking also is strange way for young people. When he finally rolls to the bar, he gets opportunity to show his interaction with society and even more. What happened in the bar was quite unusual.

Many elders are not properly respected. Our reality demands for us more and more. Having no time is a typical symptom of it. My point is, that people are overworked and can not take care of their parents like it used to be. So the story is about current state of elder people. What is more older people can not fit to this word and they behave sometimes strange. I remember my grandparents and visiting them was also funny. When they started to show their point of view our family had fun in positive meaning, of course.

How to sum up? Reading writings is not my favorite thing to do. Bad memories form language lessons. I wasn not interested what the author would like to hand down to the readers, but this story which I have picked up, could be readable and I can recommend it. Humor is modern and it was written by young person so it was easy to interpret. Now after my presentation I am sure, that you are willing to read this story. Just kidding.

Hope it isn't so bad.
 
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Re:Can anyone correct my short review? 4 Months, 2 Weeks ago  
What? What what? I am trying to understand, but my foggy brain won't let that happen....
 
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Re:Can anyone correct my short review? 4 Months, 2 Weeks ago  
i played with it and sent few thoughts to your pm box...

am i wrong or does the last paragraph state that you weren't really interested in the story...

curious!
 
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Re:Can anyone correct my short review? 4 Months, 2 Weeks ago  
You speak of a story, but what, or where is this story you speak of. It almost sounds like the one I have up now... but different. Curious to read it...so whats it called?
 
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Re:Can anyone correct my short review? 4 Months, 2 Weeks ago  
It's Crazy Old Man's Night Out written by Tim Lovett.
 
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Re:Can anyone correct my short review? 4 Months, 2 Weeks ago  
I am so confused... Why did you do this review? Do you mean for someone to correct it? It's a nice review I'm sure the author would appreciate it, so maybe you should post it as a comment on the story?
 
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Re:Can anyone correct my short review? 4 Months, 2 Weeks ago  
I mean spelling and gramma :d this guy Tarhead Mugwump helped me. Thx for your consideration.
 
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