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About Myself:

Call me some sort of queen of some sort of tragic metaphorical thing. Cause, um, that's what I tend on being.

Okay, so me? I'm insane. Or at least that's what I've been told by a few teachers and counselors and many many people that do not know me. I'm not ashamed of this though, because, you know, it means I'm associated with that which is craziness. I am. Mmhmm.

I could go on for a gogolplex of minutes about beaches and cotton zippy jackets because, hey, look, there's enough space, but I'm going to save you the scads of research and interpretations. I'll just go on for a few minutes.

I'm keen on death and decomposition. No. I'm not emo or gothic or sick. I like to WRITE about it. I like to take the most beautiful love couple and RIP. THEM. APART. I like to kill off lovers and make horribly exagerrated issues out of little tiny closed-lid-on-the-jar ones. I like to record every little bead of sweat on the woman's head when she sees her life's physical form gutted on the carpet. That sort of droll; that sort of fabulous droll.

And so it's STRANGE. I know you're thinking it. It's insane and "far out" and "completely seedy" *my god*... But that's okay. The way I see it? Happy endings can have sequels and sequels can end bad. Tragedies are ended forever. The characters are dead or near dead or so freaking screwed up they might as well be dead. No room for this and that and knitting up a new nashiki on THAT silken jumble. Just ends. Just frayed ends that cannot be twined back together.

But I digress... I'm really a rather happy person. I'm actually an entirely happy person. Cheers to you! Happy writing, reading... Breathing... blablabla. :)

ZQ

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Jan 29, 2008	Burning Pots & Missing Plots	Miscellaneous Stories	238
Jan 10, 2008	Star Boy Chronicles [Section 1]	Miscellaneous Stories	357
Jan 8, 2008	Buffy The Vampire Slayer: Diaries; Issue 1; Dark Willow	Romance	589
Jan 4, 2008	+++Ladies of Torture+++	Miscellaneous Stories	403
Jan 4, 2008	4 Short Poems For The Prose-Annoyed	Poetry	297
Jan 4, 2008	Maxwell	Poetry	256
Jan 3, 2008	Satine's Musings On Her Love	Romance	413
Jan 3, 2008	Cupid's Brother	Miscellaneous Stories	499
Dec 4, 2007	Comatose State	Romance	633
Nov 29, 2007	Settled Dust	Romance	1116

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Title article: Maxwell
Date: 2008-01-07 12:26:28

Deborah and Gina are the archetypes of the characters in "Heavenly Creatures" a Peter Jackson film made back in the early 90s including Kate Winslet about a true murder case of the 50s.

Title article: axis of a queen
Date: 2008-01-04 12:59:16

Does this have anything to do with gambling? I got a gambling vibe. I interpreted it as that anyways... Good job though. It was very raw. I like that.

ZQ

Title article: The Believer Who Got Betrayed
Date: 2008-01-04 12:57:17

I notice 3 things, dear writer:

#1- you loathe periods, because they are absent

#2- you like the coinage "half to death"

and #3- you enjoy J names...

We share one thing. The J names thing. My novel's main characters are J names. :)

Oh and also you like 80s music which is also very nice. :) You need to mention some Taylor Dayne. Good. :)

ZQ

Title article: This after
Date: 2008-01-04 12:48:11

Love this. :) Really. I think you have a definate passion for le poésie. This is a hard thing to come by too! So many strive and so many... Fall into the the swamp and dirty their trousers. Good job!

ZQ

Title article: the Processor, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-01-04 12:45:21

Oh the drama of the midmorning routine! Don't orget apostrophes! Apostrophes are our friends, my dear Processor friend.

So are you thinking about having a short-chaptered or a long chaptered book? You could certainly combine both chapters. Unless you jumped right into the bringing-the-reader-up-to-date bit and spent caputilo uno on that alone. Whatever's fine, though... It's all in the way of a writer!

I'd like a full description of the characters looks though or a little more on their personalities soon if that's not too much! Always love to mentally see the people I'm spying on! Hehe. :)

ZQ

Title article: the Processor, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-01-04 12:38:37

You have a little trouble with tenses, but I think we all from time to time so I won't fault you on it! I think you could make this a wonderful tale of a... "processor" :) and then publish it and all that terrific jazz.

I think you should add on to the paragraph and really develop their love connection. You could delve into what it felt like for him when they kissed, or specific examples of him crushing on her. Maybe even tell why the friend and her broke it off. He could play in to the story later! Hmm!

But I'm one for tragedies and I'd love to see a tragic atmosphere. That's why I would love to hear all about the desperate feelings of the guy as he pined for the girl. You know?

Great job though! Hope this helps!

ZQ

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