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Total number of comments: 25

Title article: The Three Women
Date: 2008-05-23 16:56:51

I prefer a story where a theme shines through the plot. I liked the idea of using three women experiencing a similar event, but I feel you really missed the mark by throwing in a seemingly random occurance and thereby ending the story. One of the great things about writing is that we are in charge of the destiny of our characters and in turn have a responsibility towards shaping an interesting, plausable, and creative story. I feel a story should not just shock someone, but instead force them to analyze what you have written and from that produce an emotive response. Randomness is a dangerous ingredent in unskilled hands.

Title article: 11:11 And 11:12 Can Be Different
Date: 2008-03-25 21:54:41
If I'm not incorrect...
Chocolate is fatal to dogs and the narrarator is actually poisoning the dog. Knowing this brings the story together immensly. In actuality, this is his entire purpose for closing his book and going for the drive.  
 
I like dogs. Oh well... 
 
Great work Nunyo! This story was very well written.

Title article: Short Story Intro/ Uncompleted
Date: 2008-03-23 18:46:45

I like where this is going, but it isn't finished, is it? I would like to read more and see what is happening between the characters...

Title article: Careful What You Wish For
Date: 2008-03-17 08:30:57
Spooky...
Nice work as usual. I'm not looking forward to going to sleep tonight, haha...

Title article: Before you land
Date: 2008-02-15 07:10:15

Clever. Nice Work.

Title article: What is Love
Date: 2008-02-09 21:20:01

A bittersweet paradox nicely documented. Nice job.

Title article: Red Hair
Date: 2008-01-26 09:12:12

Overall, a good read. I think the passion of your characters was very well defined. I also thought the portrayal of the traditions of the muslim faith and how it contrasted with Saleem's own beliefs and desires was done nicely as well. I think that you could have made the transitions between the time periods and events a little smoother, though I was still able to understand the chronology. This story almost begs for more depth, perhaps a longer version (novel/novella) may be in the works?

Title article: Aņo Viejo
Date: 2008-01-20 20:32:23
Really nice work
I really liked this piece. The storyteller's experiences with sickness and death contrast rather significantly with the celebration of the New Year outside the hospital and help to portray the wide spectrum of events a life may know. I also like your writing style. Good work.

Title article: Duality
Date: 2008-01-16 19:48:06
Very nice...
Very nicely done...Deeply cognisant. Great job.

Title article: My Gift
Date: 2008-01-16 08:38:39

your prose is very well written but I cannot appreciate the theme of your story as it is to me senseless, even when taken in the context of gothic romanticism

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