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There are times in our lives when it seems that Life...

Chapter 1 The year was 2003, the country was killing...

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www.myspace.com/myonlysyn

About Myself:

Maurice (3rd) Hawkins. People have asked me several times why the name 3rd. I look at the world and life a little different than most. I use my 3rd eye sort to speak. In life we visualize things with our peripheral vision and don’t stop to analyze or think about what we actually see. I am a visionary artist. I hope that people will understand that what I am trying to do is set a new standard in blending the music world and the artistic boundaries of urban literature. Hopefully you will agree upon the finished product. Hence I give you …
"My Only Syn" , 'Wake Me When It's Over" , Motorcycle Anthologies: Suzuki's Life/Heaven's Girl/Sups Cycles

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Nov 18, 2008	Motorcycle Anthologies: Heaven's Girl, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	84
Nov 18, 2008	Motorcycle Anthologies: Suzuki's Life Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	71

Comments

Total number of comments: 6

Title article: Degenerates; Cocaine., Chapter 1
Date: 2008-11-18 09:26:06

try again please
I only checked this to read because it had baltimore in it but i didn't understand it that well. im not from that era but still you need to define what and who your audience is more. and yeah do a spell check but other than that not a complete loss i give it a two.
3rd hawkins

Title article: A small revenge
Date: 2008-11-18 09:24:03

not bad
Hey the story kinda lost me a little but i liked the whole porn start thing and i could have sworn i read this before. did u post this somewhere else maybe. I love revenge stories a swell but maybe you should extend what you wrote a little more o.k.
3rd hawkins

Title article: Slime, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-11-18 08:56:10

so so
not bad i mean it was o.k. i think you should be a little more detailed and stretch out your scene a little more. i think you have talent and the making of a good writer. My only other suggestion is to use a little more passion and less horror and i think that will make this a winner. 3rd hawkins

Title article: I was a teenage ghost, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-11-18 08:53:34

good start
hello that was cute. Have you ever thought of making a series for young readers. i think that it would do well especially around the holidays. I like what you have written so far. My only suggestion is that you be a little more detailed in your writting and expand yourself. Good start. 3rd hawkins

Title article: Santa's Little Helper, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-11-18 08:51:09

Geat
I really like that. I have a 7 and a 5 year old fdaughter and i would love to do something simular. I hope that you continue to write and i do want to say that i am proud of you and wish you much success. maybe we can collaborate on sonmething i would love that. thank you. 3rd hawkins

Title article: To Distraction - 1
Date: 2008-11-18 08:48:15

I like it. It was different and intrigueing.