The Book Cellar

The Book Cellar April walked out to her...

Before you land

I lay asleep, and as I sleep I'm dreaming,...

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Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)
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Member Since 06/12/2007
Last Online 08/21/2008
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Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Aug 12, 2008Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 53
Jul 25, 2008Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 162
May 13, 2008Do You Love Me Still?Poetry 426
Apr 29, 2008Nutty AbbotPoetry 339
Mar 6, 2008InsideMiscellaneous Stories 382
Jan 25, 2008InsanePoetry 1371

Comments

Total number of comments: 339

Title article: To BELIEVE or NOT To BELIEVE
Date: 2008-08-18 12:27:18

This is very good. You lagged it a bit during your narration of what resulted for the Intellectual and Zombie in relation to their duties, but it didn't take away very from the core structure. It drove me to deep thought throughout; I found truth in all three character's initial takes on spirituality, and in the concluding idea. The Guru's method did in the end come through though, all three were finally able to think in unison (come to the same conclusion).  
Really liked this (story); very well-written. I enjoy complex subjects being told in simple, narrowed-down terms.

Title article: Just a Tease
Date: 2008-08-09 18:19:06

Highly entertaining twist. You did well in arranging the story for us to misconstrue until the shocking end.  
Assuming his teacher is not really a tease, him calling her that in his anger proves his immaturity (here, due to his young age); but I think this can be applied to adult relationships, how the love-stricken turned disillusioned can handle the blow immaturely with name calling or bubbling hatred...  
I liked this very much. Good job.

Title article: A Binding Constraint
Date: 2008-08-04 11:09:15

Beautiful. 
An uninteresting remark, but 
all that is necessary to say.

Title article: Peanut Butter and Doom
Date: 2008-07-28 13:03:47

"the brown cream fostering nuts on a smooth olive surface" was a near perfect description of it (a freshly-opened jar of peanut butter, I mean). It's not the humor I specifically enjoy, but your high points, I'd say, were the last paragraph and the 'author's note.'

Title article: Love From a Twelve Year Old
Date: 2008-07-28 12:39:29

It was a bit unsettling, even the font and color you chose to write this in (sort of pedophilic); simple misconception. Truthfully though, this isn't a story. No, setting, strong character development, plot, climax...  
So, I dunno, I'm at a loss.

Title article: A Free Gift For You
Date: 2008-07-28 11:32:29

Seems you don't know enough of the topic to make a convincing argument (that is assuming you were trying to make one). You didn't even have the truth to distort. But if you had, it's obvious you would have bent it to accommodate your ideologies, and that's just as questionable. And really, it projected more as an attack rather than a thought-provoking piece. What this needed is some clever, sharp-witted remarks.

Title article: Apples and Crows
Date: 2008-07-15 16:14:25

"In Portsmouth and Southsea" is overused.  
And it's beyond evident that you handpicked words just for the sake of rhyming. 
Personally didn't like the oddities. There's simply too much canvas when you write of the absurd.

Title article: Wordsmith
Date: 2008-06-25 16:19:05

Your personal efforts to be unconventional strongly come through in this. I like your writing because I don't have to ever offer any real constructive criticism. It's professional writing that I can just placidly enjoy. Excellent.

Title article: For you
Date: 2008-06-12 12:51:08

Ya ya, definitely stimulating! 
Really liked how it seemed that you were addressing us, the readers. In other words, the reader is almost made to believe that it was written especially for him/her (it's how it made me feel anyway, aha ^^;). This also had a Lewis Carol feel to it, especially towards the end. Nice.

Title article: Spent The Day With An Angel
Date: 2008-06-03 13:15:49

Liked how this embodied some sort of epiphany; one that steers closer to mending things, than staying glued to the same self-destructive spot.

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03/27/2008 10:53:57Re:The idea of poetry....Off-Topic599
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Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)

Created On: 03/05/2008 09:35:10

If guestbooks were made out of instruction manuals and do-it-yourself hardware stores I still wouldn't know what to do with them.
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^):

Egoist (Egoist)

Created On: 02/05/2008 12:48:54
Edited By Egoist (Egoist) On: 02/07/2008 16:01:41


Always enjoy your energy...IN YOUR STORIES AND COMMENTS...heheh
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Thank you very much.

Mugen (Dirkin)

Australia
Created On: 01/28/2008 19:31:53

Hallo! Thanks for your kind comments! Keep writing

Barbie Dorrough (Barbie)

Japan
Created On: 01/17/2008 11:43:52
Edited By Barbie Dorrough (Barbie) On: 01/17/2008 11:44:07


I live on the island of Okinawa...but Tokyo, wow, thats a sight to behold. If you can go there, at least once, in your lifetime. With your passion for dressing up in amime gear...you will fit right in. They really do that here....

David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump)

Created On: 12/19/2007 00:35:34

okay, times up...

you need to get your fingers back on the keyboard. we need another series!
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): On it.

that tabithah person
Created On: 09/17/2007 15:09:35

whens the next tomo coming out???
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Ooo, I'm not so sure. Seems I've got writer's block. heh heh heh. I've also been swamped with work, and haven't had time. The next part to Tomo's Guns is the last, so I have to think of a decent ending. No worries, I should get to it before the end of this year(?). heh... uh, or before! I dunno. I tend to not finish what I start. But I need to see things through this time. I will try my best. Take care of yourself.

Naragi

K-Town
Created On: 07/17/2007 07:33:20

Just finished reading all five of your tomo's gun stories. very nice
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Thank you, Naragi. I'm glad you enjoyed them. I'm hoping the 6th part will be completed and published by this coming Sunday. (just in case you're interested ^-^)

Tommy Lee (Yfcomp)

Created On: 06/29/2007 12:41:11

I am not going to deny that I am looking forward to reading an action packed story when I click on Tomo's Gun. But I was actually expecting some kind of romance between Roberta and Marco. I definitely think it would add more values to your storyline. For series of multiple stories, like Tomo's Gun, it may be a good idea to have variation of themes here and there to keep it interesting. I can't wait to read your next one
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Thank you Tommy! You've helped me a great deal.

Tommy Lee (Yfcomp)

Created On: 06/29/2007 08:30:16

I definitely loved all of the Tomo's gun series. I am glad to hear that you are reconsidering to continue writing Tomo's Gun.
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Tommy, thank you so very much. Because of you and others that share your opinion I will definitely finish "Tomo's Guns"... Changing the subject, I have something I'd like to ask you. It's already been decided that I will add prolonged action scenes, but do you think that I should also add a bit of... uh, I'm lacking the word here... oh, I dunno, romance? This sort of thing appeals more to the female audience, I would think. As a boy, what is your opinion? I don't want to ruin "Tomo's Guns" by making it korny, I just want to make it understood that Roberta is human, and is capable of sharing human emotions. I'll be looking out for your answer. Thanks!

Tabithah Laenkit (K.Y.)

Created On: 06/28/2007 12:38:49

what? oh dont quit i loved your series and u r a very talented writer!! but if its wat u want 2 do no one can stop you...
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): You really think so? I was thinking it was a bit generic. Getting into all the details will take some effort... but I think, I'll continue the series. It's nice to know there are some that like "Tomo's Guns". Thank you Tabithah.

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