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Member Since	06/12/2007
Last Online	09/04/2008
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About Myself:

Adaptive.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 3, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 4	Miscellaneous Stories	40
Aug 26, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 3	Miscellaneous Stories	72
Aug 12, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	100
Jul 25, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	205
May 13, 2008	Do You Love Me Still?	Poetry	449
Apr 29, 2008	Nutty Abbot	Poetry	365
Mar 6, 2008	Inside	Miscellaneous Stories	397
Jan 25, 2008	Insane	Poetry	1403

Comments

Total number of comments: 336

Title article: Ode to Simplicity
Date: 2008-09-03 14:49:26

This is beyond excellent. The structure, style, vocab., and tone, but especially the content's significance. I took much from this; all of your work is intellectually enlightening. I do not know even where to begin summarizing what I got from this. Probably my favorite I've read from you so far.

Title article: Love At First Sight
Date: 2008-09-03 14:33:35

Again, I see an emphasis on harsh reality's blow. You did well in expressing the love fool's euphoria, but a mediocre job in destroying it. The beginning to middle flowed alright, but the transition made from middle to end was shaky. I did enjoy the read though.

Title article: HORROR
Date: 2008-09-03 14:03:58

Good.
I was going back and forth with whether you were trying to portray horror as a tangible piece of mass within a being once striped of all other matter (?), or as one being entirely void of self-fabricated tranquilizers, more in the sense of the attitudes we tend to adopt in order to cope with difficulties, to escape reality; because to directly confront an upsetting, unprocessed reality sounds truly horrific. I didn't so much like the format this was in nor how it was written, it sometimes seemed contradictory, but I did like what it lead me to think, no, just the fact that it MADE me think.

Title article: Life As He Knew It.
Date: 2008-08-26 15:36:37

I'm assuming the whole deal with the beverages is alluding to the women they had going back and forth between them, I dunno; if that's the case the orange juice bit was humorous, as were other instances in this. But I wasn't enticed into going any further with this, in trying to decipher the rest. Dialog format's bad, but you know that.

Title article: To BELIEVE or NOT To BELIEVE
Date: 2008-08-18 12:27:18

This is very good. You lagged it a bit during your narration of what resulted for the Intellectual and Zombie in relation to their duties, but it didn't take away very from the core structure. It drove me to deep thought throughout; I found truth in all three character's initial takes on spirituality, and in the concluding idea. The Guru's method did in the end come through though, all three were finally able to think in unison (come to the same conclusion).
Really liked this (story); very well-written. I enjoy complex subjects being told in simple, narrowed-down terms.

Title article: Just a Tease
Date: 2008-08-09 18:19:06

Highly entertaining twist. You did well in arranging the story for us to misconstrue until the shocking end.
Assuming his teacher is not really a tease, him calling her that in his anger proves his immaturity (here, due to his young age); but I think this can be applied to adult relationships, how the love-stricken turned disillusioned can handle the blow immaturely with name calling or bubbling hatred...
I liked this very much. Good job.

Title article: A Binding Constraint
Date: 2008-08-04 11:09:15

Beautiful.
An uninteresting remark, but
all that is necessary to say.

Title article: Peanut Butter and Doom
Date: 2008-07-28 13:03:47

"the brown cream fostering nuts on a smooth olive surface" was a near perfect description of it (a freshly-opened jar of peanut butter, I mean). It's not the humor I specifically enjoy, but your high points, I'd say, were the last paragraph and the 'author's note.'

Title article: Love From a Twelve Year Old
Date: 2008-07-28 12:39:29

It was a bit unsettling, even the font and color you chose to write this in (sort of pedophilic); simple misconception. Truthfully though, this isn't a story. No, setting, strong character development, plot, climax...
So, I dunno, I'm at a loss.

Title article: A Free Gift For You
Date: 2008-07-28 11:32:29

Seems you don't know enough of the topic to make a convincing argument (that is assuming you were trying to make one). You didn't even have the truth to distort. But if you had, it's obvious you would have bent it to accommodate your ideologies, and that's just as questionable. And really, it projected more as an attack rather than a thought-provoking piece. What this needed is some clever, sharp-witted remarks.

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05/14/2008 08:49:48	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37064
05/06/2008 21:30:01	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37064
05/06/2008 21:24:03	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37064
05/06/2008 17:08:48	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37064
04/17/2008 16:01:24	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37064
04/17/2008 15:45:05	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37064
03/31/2008 09:24:47	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37064
03/27/2008 10:53:57	Re:The idea of poetry....	Off-Topic	625
03/22/2008 16:13:21	Re:1800's Thread	Off-Topic	15440
03/20/2008 21:44:15	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37064

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Guestbook

Name	Entry
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 05/13/2008 17:57:57 Hello, Jezebel.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 05/06/2008 15:11:27 Boo!!!!!!!! haha. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Eep! (haha)
Mugen (Dirkin)	Created On: 05/05/2008 00:22:57 Guestbook tag! You're it Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Uh, hmm...
Mugen (Dirkin) that place between dreaming and awake, where you're kind of doing both	Created On: 05/02/2008 06:43:46 I just wanted to share a joke, via guestbook: Whats brown and sticky? A stick! Ahaha omg I'm lame
Lori Branson (lorislittlesecret) Here and there	Created On: 04/28/2008 05:54:02 Nice Wolf....
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 04/21/2008 13:14:00 haha i had to get on here sooner or later. well the two entries you have on here i think are absolutely amazing. really interesting ideas. And your personality is just as amazing. Thank you for making this site alot more enjoyable. Oh yea and your name Cell, just curious on what it means? is there a specific reason for Cell. i think it's pretty cool. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): You are too kind (heh). I like your poetry, now that I've delved into it a little bit more; it's so thought-provoking; it's excellent, really! Cell... I like it because of how intricate all of the words used to describe a cell's composition are... if that makes any sense, at all (???). And your screen name (resistanceisfreedom) tells me you have idealistic views, and are in many senses a liberal... that is very cool. Many happinesses! Yo.
David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump)	Created On: 04/15/2008 01:47:00 your personalities bees multiplicating! Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Ahh, yes... many forms have I. Ha!
retrocious.[/sneh] (hxc inc.)	Created On: 04/13/2008 06:57:53 D: i am wondering what happened to that chaptered story you had? I was going to go read it today because I have time and -poof- it's not there. i was going to leave such pretty comments, too. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Agh, that! Umm, I took it off because I wasn't satisfied with it (in general). It was really very bad... It only lasted what it did because so many people left such kind comments^^. The other two (Inside & Insane), I actually like. Heh, thanks anyway! Adieu^^
retrocious.[/sneh] (hxc inc.)	Created On: 04/10/2008 13:38:01 Ah, but I love thee more. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Tee-hee!
Mugen (Dirkin) infinity	Created On: 04/04/2008 04:01:49 Mugen lol. I shall name you megumi Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): ^O^ so cute. Thank you!