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Member Since	06/12/2007
Last Online	09/06/2008
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About Myself:

Adaptive.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 3, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 4	Miscellaneous Stories	43
Aug 26, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 3	Miscellaneous Stories	78
Aug 12, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	106
Jul 25, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	213
May 13, 2008	Do You Love Me Still?	Poetry	457
Apr 29, 2008	Nutty Abbot	Poetry	370
Mar 6, 2008	Inside	Miscellaneous Stories	399
Jan 25, 2008	Insane	Poetry	1405

Comments

Title article: 23rd Century Digital Girl: Chapter 2
Date: 2008-05-14 09:45:55

It's pretty hard to even find organs to transplant, and I assume the level of deaths has decreased, since that other Nicole lived to be 101 in 2068 (by the way is it Nicole Kidman? heh), and this Nicole was able to be salvaged after her car 'accident' so where are these organs coming from? Genetically engineered? Probably, right?

One word sums this all up: BIONIC.

Agh, I could picture her flimsy body. Oh, and good
cliffhanger.

Will read the next one.

Title article: 23rd Century Digital Girl: Chapter 1
Date: 2008-05-14 09:27:37

Good.
Ha, what a cool title. That's what drew me to reading
it. Reminds me of a series I wrote on here (Tomo's
Guns), but I deleted it. Anyway, 'nuff about me, this was
not so bad. I am certainly curious enough to read
any continuations. I like all the robot, genetically
engineered parts, digital systems crap (all that
pretty sci-fi, futuristic stuff) so of course I had to read this. I think I will read the 2nd part now.

Title article: Predators of the Night
Date: 2008-05-14 09:10:53

Not too much to say... was descriptive and
quite vivid. For an eerie effect, I guess you
added the line, "The pack thirsts for warm blood."
But I was like, 'They aren't werewolves you know?'
But, be at ease, it was good. Still dunno
why this is written in poem format, but if
it weren't I probably would not have read it.
Also dunno if you'd like this to be digested as
symbolic or not.

Adieu.

Title article: My World
Date: 2008-05-14 08:58:23

K, this needn't have been a poem.
Read more like a narrative.
It was, to me, in no sense, poetic.
Luck.

Title article: Howard
Date: 2008-05-14 07:57:13

Was drawn into the story.
Good. Several grammar and spelling errors, but I
dealt. You did a decent job of taking us through the
mind of this cynic... this sexual predator. What you
came up with in the end was good, thought it was
suitable.

Title article: Youtopia, Ch. 16
Date: 2008-05-12 10:58:04

S-E-X... has the mere enunciation of the word
lost it's head-rotating effect? No, I don't think it
has quite yet (ha).
Hmm, I see where this is going... oi, how very
tragic.
This one seemed to lack a bit of the effort you
usually put into each chapter, but ya, lethargy
must be the explanation. No worries, still liked it.

Title article: Youtopia, Ch. 15
Date: 2008-05-12 10:37:30

Ah, sorry, I had read this already, but
couldn't comment. Thought I'd raise your
writing disposition to broiling degrees, well
at least to a full 100.
Ha, these new 'jock-type' characters are
something; good leverage.
I can hardly if ever find any 'holes' in your
storyline, you have everything under control;
you seem to fully understand the function of minor
characters, setting, plot, main characters, motif,
mood, etc.
Ah, what a stress-inducing hanger. Great job.

Title article: Messenger of Hope
Date: 2008-05-10 23:41:45

I thought this one would be different
from your other most recent poems, but
it isn't. it's a bit more subtle, but it is
expressing much of the same emotion
the others are... this is weird, but it's almost
as if you'd like this to be true, but it's not,
it's reaching towards breaking past some
hardship, but it is not succeeding...
it is really good though. as I've said
before, you are quite agile with pulling
stanzas together (and even in rhyming format).

Title article: A Night with the Babysitter
Date: 2008-05-06 13:42:49

Really liked it!
Ha, ya, pretty deranged for an eight
year old kid, but eh, I liked this very much.
The cutting her up into smaller pieces seemed
way out of place to me... and I really didn't
think you would take it so far as to make the
boy self-inflict an injury at the end, but you didn't
limit yourself (that's good), and
I guess this is just how your humor rolls... I would
have drawn the line at making her seem drunk (that
was good, ha).

This was adorably funny to me:

"'She’s a Miss,' I say aloud as I dig with my one good hand, 'that means she doesn’t have a husband. If she doesn’t have a husband then she can’t have any/a family!'"

Even if this was kept a bit more "G" (because technically it should have been [it's a humor piece and your main character is an 8-year old child] but nowadays, I understand that people are creating new trends) it would have been just as great. This was very well written as well! Thought you did a good job with imagery and similes.

Title article: Nutty Abbot
Date: 2008-05-04 22:43:49

Thank you so much Mr. Neve!
But I could never equal, much
less top YOUR creativity!
Thank you so very much once again^^.

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03/27/2008 10:53:57	Re:The idea of poetry....	Off-Topic	631
03/22/2008 16:13:21	Re:1800's Thread	Off-Topic	15517
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Guestbook

Name	Entry
jesse (jesse2008) JUTTA TIME!	Created On: 08/03/2008 20:21:23 EKK, IT'S JUTTA, RUN! or as I like to call her Cell. Cell Motrin?
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 07/20/2008 07:45:29 Call me a spaz, do you. While you sport old lady glasses, you call me a spaz? While you toss verbal garbage at the king, you call me a spaz? Well. I like the glasses, anyway. Watch yo mouf.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) tied up and gagged in someone's basement!	Created On: 07/05/2008 23:43:04 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/06/2008 14:54:17 ahhh, you're red! red scares me because red reminds me of blood, which reminds me of revenge, which reminds me of christmas, which reminds me of serial killing hippies! who are you? who am I? i need to know these questions or i'm going to go insane...oopps, too late. I was going through my comments and i wanted to thank you for reading and leaving such good comment on my story, Dog. so, umm ... thanks
jesse (jesse2008) How rude of me	Created On: 07/05/2008 20:23:06 I should have signed your Profile Book, well I did it. YAY! You keep on writing Cell, yes I am calling you by your old name. Question where did that name come from, I know it's not from DBZ. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): ^^"cell" came from those itty bitty microscopic things.. the ones with a nucleus... i dunno, i like the sound of what makes up a cell, and the fact that a cell is the basic structural unit of all organisms. thank you for signing my profile book^^.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 06/18/2008 07:47:59 You forgot to add fanny pack to your about me. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): No, I dumped you just a few days ago... don't you remember? It was for a coin purse.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 06/13/2008 12:50:17 BATGIRL. FANNYPACK. CHOOSE ONE. OR BOTH. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): eh, i refuse to take this multiple-choice test. it is bias.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine) Cali.	Created On: 06/12/2008 14:35:47 >>>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote (RE): >>>>>>>>>>>>Yes, I'd love to be your fanny pack. In fact, can I be a fanny pack and your sidekick, at different times, when I'm in different moods? I implore you! >>>>>>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>You are more like a fanny pack or a sidekick than a landlady. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Funny, I remember the conversation going more like this: >>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>>Eh, I'm bored. Goodbye. >>>>>>>>>> cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>>>>Of course Juttabell, and you know that they only go "peuw peuw" for you! >>>>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>>>> Fanny Pack (i.e. you), not unless you have some lasers inside you. >>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>>>>>>> You are so gracious Juttabell, please, may I compliment you on your anatomy? >>>>>CELL wrote: >>>>>>>> Eh, sure you can be my fanny pack. >>>>cookingWine wrote: >>>>> Please Juttabell!
Mugen (Dirkin) Australia-izzle	Created On: 06/05/2008 17:52:59 Just dropping a line! heres a cat =^;^= Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Ahaha, how cute! =^;^=
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 05/28/2008 13:53:08 JEZEBEL! SHUT UP! YOU STINK! Er. Forgive me. Superman was overtaken by the hulk of bad insults. Juttabell, write something new. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Juttabell, heh, that's so cute^^; I will write something new in due time; I'm swamped.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 05/24/2008 08:08:22 how sweet. Ai Shite Imasu right back!!