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Member Since	06/12/2007
Last Online	09/06/2008
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About Myself:

Adaptive.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 3, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 4	Miscellaneous Stories	43
Aug 26, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 3	Miscellaneous Stories	79
Aug 12, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	106
Jul 25, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	213
May 13, 2008	Do You Love Me Still?	Poetry	457
Apr 29, 2008	Nutty Abbot	Poetry	370
Mar 6, 2008	Inside	Miscellaneous Stories	399
Jan 25, 2008	Insane	Poetry	1407

Comments

Total number of comments: 341

Title article: Wisdom Is For The Birds
Date: 2008-09-05 15:56:53

I like this line, "'Your wings are to be chariots to bring others to my presence.'" When one is birthed with a distinguishing talent, strength, or ability it should be used for the greater good, but most commonly when people have outstanding traits they become full of themselves and pretentious, seeking their own gratification, it's almost punishable. The all around message was a good one. I enjoyed the fact that you wrote a parable to simply illustrate a good lesson; Jesus did it for a reason, because they're highly effective. Good job.

Title article: Sometimes It Still Hurts
Date: 2008-09-05 15:45:16

Forgot to add the mother (and people) too ridiculously close to "have noticed nothing odd", and the religious group that employed such detestable tactics to mend the situation with the degenerate stepfather.

Title article: Sometimes It Still Hurts
Date: 2008-09-05 15:37:11

I am very fervently hoping that this is not sections of an autobiography (you filed it under miscellaneous and not non-fiction). I don't quite know what to say. Since I cannot honestly empathize, I'd imagine whatever supposed form of console I'd have to offer would seem insensitive. But I am, of course, appalled with the barbarism and depravity of talked about man.

Told engagingly well.

Title article: The Monkey
Date: 2008-09-05 12:29:43

The descriptive details were well-written and were what held my attention the majority of the time (particularly those pertaining to the apes'; which, was where you most strongly drew an image for the reader), rather than the events. Humorous too. The narrating was also very well done. Highly enjoyed it, but the conclusion (i.e the last paragraph) crippled the rest of the story a bit, it didn't quite live up to the rest, as if it were written in haste...

Title article: There Is No Me Without You
Date: 2008-09-05 10:57:58

I'll give it a high rating because I think you've accurately captured the emotion you set out to project. But that last statement, "Love Forever," is a drag to read; that's when it went from cute and warm to corny and uncomfortable.

Title article: Ode to Simplicity
Date: 2008-09-03 14:49:26

This is beyond excellent. The structure, style, vocab., and tone, but especially the content's significance. I took much from this; all of your work is intellectually enlightening. I do not know even where to begin summarizing what I got from this. Probably my favorite I've read from you so far.

Title article: Love At First Sight
Date: 2008-09-03 14:33:35

Again, I see an emphasis on harsh reality's blow. You did well in expressing the love fool's euphoria, but a mediocre job in destroying it. The beginning to middle flowed alright, but the transition made from middle to end was shaky. I did enjoy the read though.

Title article: HORROR
Date: 2008-09-03 14:03:58

Good.
I was going back and forth with whether you were trying to portray horror as a tangible piece of mass within a being once striped of all other matter (?), or as one being entirely void of self-fabricated tranquilizers, more in the sense of the attitudes we tend to adopt in order to cope with difficulties, to escape reality; because to directly confront an upsetting, unprocessed reality sounds truly horrific. I didn't so much like the format this was in nor how it was written, it sometimes seemed contradictory, but I did like what it lead me to think, no, just the fact that it MADE me think.

Title article: Life As He Knew It.
Date: 2008-08-26 15:36:37

I'm assuming the whole deal with the beverages is alluding to the women they had going back and forth between them, I dunno; if that's the case the orange juice bit was humorous, as were other instances in this. But I wasn't enticed into going any further with this, in trying to decipher the rest. Dialog format's bad, but you know that.

Title article: To BELIEVE or NOT To BELIEVE
Date: 2008-08-18 12:27:18

This is very good. You lagged it a bit during your narration of what resulted for the Intellectual and Zombie in relation to their duties, but it didn't take away very from the core structure. It drove me to deep thought throughout; I found truth in all three character's initial takes on spirituality, and in the concluding idea. The Guru's method did in the end come through though, all three were finally able to think in unison (come to the same conclusion).
Really liked this (story); very well-written. I enjoy complex subjects being told in simple, narrowed-down terms.

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05/14/2008 08:49:48	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37260
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05/06/2008 21:24:03	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37260
05/06/2008 17:08:48	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37260
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04/17/2008 15:45:05	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37260
03/31/2008 09:24:47	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37260
03/27/2008 10:53:57	Re:The idea of poetry....	Off-Topic	631
03/22/2008 16:13:21	Re:1800's Thread	Off-Topic	15561
03/20/2008 21:44:15	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	37260

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Guestbook

Name	Entry
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 05/13/2008 17:57:57 Hello, Jezebel.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 05/06/2008 15:11:27 Boo!!!!!!!! haha. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Eep! (haha)
Mugen (Dirkin)	Created On: 05/05/2008 00:22:57 Guestbook tag! You're it Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Uh, hmm...
Mugen (Dirkin) that place between dreaming and awake, where you're kind of doing both	Created On: 05/02/2008 06:43:46 I just wanted to share a joke, via guestbook: Whats brown and sticky? A stick! Ahaha omg I'm lame
Lori Branson (lorislittlesecret) Here and there	Created On: 04/28/2008 05:54:02 Nice Wolf....
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 04/21/2008 13:14:00 haha i had to get on here sooner or later. well the two entries you have on here i think are absolutely amazing. really interesting ideas. And your personality is just as amazing. Thank you for making this site alot more enjoyable. Oh yea and your name Cell, just curious on what it means? is there a specific reason for Cell. i think it's pretty cool. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): You are too kind (heh). I like your poetry, now that I've delved into it a little bit more; it's so thought-provoking; it's excellent, really! Cell... I like it because of how intricate all of the words used to describe a cell's composition are... if that makes any sense, at all (???). And your screen name (resistanceisfreedom) tells me you have idealistic views, and are in many senses a liberal... that is very cool. Many happinesses! Yo.
David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump)	Created On: 04/15/2008 01:47:00 your personalities bees multiplicating! Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Ahh, yes... many forms have I. Ha!
retrocious.[/sneh] (hxc inc.)	Created On: 04/13/2008 06:57:53 D: i am wondering what happened to that chaptered story you had? I was going to go read it today because I have time and -poof- it's not there. i was going to leave such pretty comments, too. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Agh, that! Umm, I took it off because I wasn't satisfied with it (in general). It was really very bad... It only lasted what it did because so many people left such kind comments^^. The other two (Inside & Insane), I actually like. Heh, thanks anyway! Adieu^^
retrocious.[/sneh] (hxc inc.)	Created On: 04/10/2008 13:38:01 Ah, but I love thee more. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Tee-hee!
Mugen (Dirkin) infinity	Created On: 04/04/2008 04:01:49 Mugen lol. I shall name you megumi Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): ^O^ so cute. Thank you!