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Member Since	06/12/2007
Last Online	10/07/2008
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Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Oct 7, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 5	Miscellaneous Stories	16
Sep 3, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 4	Miscellaneous Stories	101
Aug 26, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 3	Miscellaneous Stories	124
Aug 12, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	139
Jul 25, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	244
May 13, 2008	Pretty-Ugly.	Poetry	490
Apr 29, 2008	Nutty Abbot	Poetry	394
Mar 6, 2008	Inside	Miscellaneous Stories	427
Jan 25, 2008	Insane	Poetry	1442

Comments

Title article: A Night with the Babysitter
Date: 2008-05-06 13:42:49

Really liked it!
Ha, ya, pretty deranged for an eight
year old kid, but eh, I liked this very much.
The cutting her up into smaller pieces seemed
way out of place to me... and I really didn't
think you would take it so far as to make the
boy self-inflict an injury at the end, but you didn't
limit yourself (that's good), and
I guess this is just how your humor rolls... I would
have drawn the line at making her seem drunk (that
was good, ha).

This was adorably funny to me:

"'She’s a Miss,' I say aloud as I dig with my one good hand, 'that means she doesn’t have a husband. If she doesn’t have a husband then she can’t have any/a family!'"

Even if this was kept a bit more "G" (because technically it should have been [it's a humor piece and your main character is an 8-year old child] but nowadays, I understand that people are creating new trends) it would have been just as great. This was very well written as well! Thought you did a good job with imagery and similes.

Title article: Nutty Abbot
Date: 2008-05-04 22:43:49

Thank you so much Mr. Neve!
But I could never equal, much
less top YOUR creativity!
Thank you so very much once again^^.

Title article: our dying america
Date: 2008-05-03 16:49:52

GREAT.
Man. Great poem.
Never could stand this mainstream, fit the mold
or else setting we've established ...
It's the stupidest thing ever.
Damn power-hungry, self-absorbed bigots.

Self-interest, that's about all you see nowadays...

Way to clearly put this out.

Excellent once again.
Personally thought this was inspirational as well.

that one negative comment must have
come from a very close-minded and easily
manipulated dumb ass.

Title article: Insane
Date: 2008-05-03 16:20:14

wow. thank you so very much
for your kind comment^^

Title article: That Lonely Syllable.
Date: 2008-05-01 13:18:27

And actually I believe she's
thinking of this while canoodling.

Title article: That Lonely Syllable.
Date: 2008-05-01 13:16:05

Wow.
Just wow.
Powerful.
Virtually disturbing
BUT,
I think this isn't as ugly
as it seems.
My guess is this is
about a woman who
wished she didn't have
to grow up.
Sigh, much like myself; I
seriously couldn't have expressed
myself better than how you've
it done here.

Loved it.

Title article: Youtopia, Ch. 14
Date: 2008-05-01 12:58:36

I hope you don't take offense, but
you seem like someone who'd excel
in writing novels like "Vampire Academy."
I haven't read it myself, but I looked
up a summary for it. Stuff like that
flies off the shelves you know.
But not only that, I'm sure you could
even write up more serious stuff.
There's I think much versatility in
your talent.

Excellent once again Sneh.

Title article: Youtopia, Ch. 13
Date: 2008-05-01 11:05:28

"only form of entertainment it seems I have left is counting exactly how many brave little hairs are still clinging, however futilely, to Mr. Cellian’s head."

Loved that line, ha.

Pretty cool, that you implemented notes between Morgue and Derek into the story. Boosted up the level of entertainment.

"And what if she had been a lesbian...would’ve she have been weirded out by my liking her? "

And this one line, interesting way of putting things. Made me think.

Great job once again! I'm heading on to the next chapter now.

Title article: Smoke, Steel, and Innuendo
Date: 2008-05-01 08:43:46

A gun is most commonly used
as a phallic symbol... I sort of
have that impregnated in my
mind... it was a good attempt, I'll
give you that.

Title article: By Myself
Date: 2008-04-30 15:16:20

Damn, 'bout 5 minutes to type this up??
Loony O.o
That is fast.
This actually helps me understand
the reason behind why some people
immediately assume they are being
targeted or attacked.

Impressive how you can channel
emotion into poetry so quickly!

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05/14/2008 08:49:48	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45194
05/06/2008 21:30:01	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45194
05/06/2008 21:24:03	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45194
05/06/2008 17:08:48	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45194
04/17/2008 16:01:24	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45194
04/17/2008 15:45:05	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45194
03/31/2008 09:24:47	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45194
03/27/2008 10:53:57	Re:The idea of poetry....	Off-Topic	712
03/22/2008 16:13:21	Re:1800's Thread	Off-Topic	16748
03/20/2008 21:44:15	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45194

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JD Kelly (Juda)

Nate Stanford (nick711)

jesse (jesse2008)

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Guestbook

Name	Entry
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 09/17/2008 12:50:21 so "A Twilight Sky" made it to your favorites. that's very hard to believe haha no, i'm kidding. i appreciate you adding it to your faves... but, it's a shame you didn't leave any comment
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/11/2008 18:05:37 You've earned points for quoting Easy Rider, by the way.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/09/2008 07:35:31 Edited By Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine) On: 09/09/2008 07:36:59 Now I get it. Well, I think it would make me a bad person, or maybe a liberator, who knows. Note: I remembered that liberator is being used pretty freely (GO REPUBLICANS) nowadays so I'll switch it to hero.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/08/2008 13:12:01 Easy Rider.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 09/07/2008 15:59:55 how's Juttabell doing?? i needed to sign this to tell you how great you are. keep it up!!
jesse (jesse2008) JUTTA TIME!	Created On: 08/03/2008 20:21:23 EKK, IT'S JUTTA, RUN! or as I like to call her Cell. Cell Motrin?
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 07/20/2008 07:45:29 Call me a spaz, do you. While you sport old lady glasses, you call me a spaz? While you toss verbal garbage at the king, you call me a spaz? Well. I like the glasses, anyway. Watch yo mouf.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) tied up and gagged in someone's basement!	Created On: 07/05/2008 23:43:04 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/06/2008 14:54:17 ahhh, you're red! red scares me because red reminds me of blood, which reminds me of revenge, which reminds me of christmas, which reminds me of serial killing hippies! who are you? who am I? i need to know these questions or i'm going to go insane...oopps, too late. I was going through my comments and i wanted to thank you for reading and leaving such good comment on my story, Dog. so, umm ... thanks
jesse (jesse2008) How rude of me	Created On: 07/05/2008 20:23:06 I should have signed your Profile Book, well I did it. YAY! You keep on writing Cell, yes I am calling you by your old name. Question where did that name come from, I know it's not from DBZ. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): ^^"cell" came from those itty bitty microscopic things.. the ones with a nucleus... i dunno, i like the sound of what makes up a cell, and the fact that a cell is the basic structural unit of all organisms. thank you for signing my profile book^^.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 06/18/2008 07:47:59 You forgot to add fanny pack to your about me. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): No, I dumped you just a few days ago... don't you remember fanny pack? It was for a coin purse.