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Member Since	06/12/2007
Last Online	10/06/2008
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Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 3, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 4	Miscellaneous Stories	101
Aug 26, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 3	Miscellaneous Stories	123
Aug 12, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	138
Jul 25, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	244
May 13, 2008	Pretty-Ugly.	Poetry	490
Apr 29, 2008	Nutty Abbot	Poetry	394
Mar 6, 2008	Inside	Miscellaneous Stories	426
Jan 25, 2008	Insane	Poetry	1442

Comments

Total number of comments: 345

Title article: I think I love you robot, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-10-04 21:16:40

Such familiar ground. The nature of his being, the woman's unsatisfaction... I absolutely loved this.

Very well written. Consistent.

A favorite.

Title article: Confessions of a Teenage Psyche Case
Date: 2008-09-23 11:04:07

Was, for the most part, clever & hilarious.

Really liked it.

Title article: Hoodlyfe Chronicles, Chapter 3
Date: 2008-09-19 13:59:10

Eh, chapters 2 & 3 all seem like you're writing down something from a movie I've seen before; the gangster concept is overdone and in the first chapter I thought maybe you'd make this particular story your own somehow, but you're not; this lacks innovation. I know you're a decent writer, that is, your conjugation skills aren't retarded, but to be a good/great writer, you need a distinct writing style, and semi-original ideas (to say the least).

Title article: Hoodlyfe Chronicles, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-09-15 13:48:17

This is more of a prelude, but I am highly interested in what is to follow. There's a glance of humor in this (ex. bold font with "I am Daunte, and this is my life" sorta 'I am Daunte hear me roar', I dunno, seemed like foreboding music should have played in the background, no, more like Eminem should have been rapping some 'my life is utter crap' or 'i've had it rough' lyrics). I'm really looking forward to the next chapter though.

Title article: Wisdom Is For The Birds
Date: 2008-09-05 15:56:53

I like this line, "'Your wings are to be chariots to bring others to my presence.'" When one is birthed with a distinguishing talent, strength, or ability it should be used for the greater good, but most commonly when people have outstanding traits they become full of themselves and pretentious, seeking their own gratification, it's almost punishable. The all around message was a good one. I enjoyed the fact that you wrote a parable to simply illustrate a good lesson; Jesus did it for a reason, because they're highly effective. Good job.

Title article: Sometimes It Still Hurts
Date: 2008-09-05 15:45:16

Forgot to add the mother (and people) too ridiculously close to "have noticed nothing odd", and the religious group that employed such detestable tactics to mend the situation with the degenerate stepfather.

Title article: Sometimes It Still Hurts
Date: 2008-09-05 15:37:11

I am very fervently hoping that this is not sections of an autobiography (you filed it under miscellaneous and not non-fiction). I don't quite know what to say. Since I cannot honestly empathize, I'd imagine whatever supposed form of console I'd have to offer would seem insensitive. But I am, of course, appalled with the barbarism and depravity of talked about man.

Told engagingly well.

Title article: The Monkey
Date: 2008-09-05 12:29:43

The descriptive details were well-written and were what held my attention the majority of the time (particularly those pertaining to the apes'; which, was where you most strongly drew an image for the reader), rather than the events. Humorous too. The narrating was also very well done. Highly enjoyed it, but the conclusion (i.e the last paragraph) crippled the rest of the story a bit, it didn't quite live up to the rest, as if it were written in haste...

Title article: There Is No Me Without You
Date: 2008-09-05 10:57:58

I'll give it a high rating because I think you've accurately captured the emotion you set out to project. But that last statement, "Love Forever," is a drag to read; that's when it went from cute and warm to corny and uncomfortable.

Title article: TO SIMPLICITY
Date: 2008-09-03 14:49:26

This is beyond excellent. The structure, style, vocab., and tone, but especially the content's significance. I took much from this; all of your work is intellectually enlightening. I do not know even where to begin summarizing what I got from this. Probably my favorite I've read from you so far.

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03/27/2008 10:53:57	Re:The idea of poetry....	Off-Topic	711
03/22/2008 16:13:21	Re:1800's Thread	Off-Topic	16722
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Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 09/17/2008 12:50:21 so "A Twilight Sky" made it to your favorites. that's very hard to believe haha no, i'm kidding. i appreciate you adding it to your faves... but, it's a shame you didn't leave any comment
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/11/2008 18:05:37 You've earned points for quoting Easy Rider, by the way.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/09/2008 07:35:31 Edited By Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine) On: 09/09/2008 07:36:59 Now I get it. Well, I think it would make me a bad person, or maybe a liberator, who knows. Note: I remembered that liberator is being used pretty freely (GO REPUBLICANS) nowadays so I'll switch it to hero.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/08/2008 13:12:01 Easy Rider.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 09/07/2008 15:59:55 how's Juttabell doing?? i needed to sign this to tell you how great you are. keep it up!!
jesse (jesse2008) JUTTA TIME!	Created On: 08/03/2008 20:21:23 EKK, IT'S JUTTA, RUN! or as I like to call her Cell. Cell Motrin?
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 07/20/2008 07:45:29 Call me a spaz, do you. While you sport old lady glasses, you call me a spaz? While you toss verbal garbage at the king, you call me a spaz? Well. I like the glasses, anyway. Watch yo mouf.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) tied up and gagged in someone's basement!	Created On: 07/05/2008 23:43:04 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/06/2008 14:54:17 ahhh, you're red! red scares me because red reminds me of blood, which reminds me of revenge, which reminds me of christmas, which reminds me of serial killing hippies! who are you? who am I? i need to know these questions or i'm going to go insane...oopps, too late. I was going through my comments and i wanted to thank you for reading and leaving such good comment on my story, Dog. so, umm ... thanks
jesse (jesse2008) How rude of me	Created On: 07/05/2008 20:23:06 I should have signed your Profile Book, well I did it. YAY! You keep on writing Cell, yes I am calling you by your old name. Question where did that name come from, I know it's not from DBZ. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): ^^"cell" came from those itty bitty microscopic things.. the ones with a nucleus... i dunno, i like the sound of what makes up a cell, and the fact that a cell is the basic structural unit of all organisms. thank you for signing my profile book^^.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 06/18/2008 07:47:59 You forgot to add fanny pack to your about me. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): No, I dumped you just a few days ago... don't you remember fanny pack? It was for a coin purse.