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Member Since	06/12/2007
Last Online	10/07/2008
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Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Oct 7, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 5	Miscellaneous Stories	13
Sep 3, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 4	Miscellaneous Stories	101
Aug 26, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 3	Miscellaneous Stories	124
Aug 12, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	138
Jul 25, 2008	Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 1	Miscellaneous Stories	244
May 13, 2008	Pretty-Ugly.	Poetry	490
Apr 29, 2008	Nutty Abbot	Poetry	394
Mar 6, 2008	Inside	Miscellaneous Stories	427
Jan 25, 2008	Insane	Poetry	1442

Comments

Title article: Do you ever play any games while you're driving?
Date: 2008-05-15 12:43:51

Eh, there were several grammar errors, a few
spelling ones. Didn't find this funny, but that's just
me; tastes vary. I really like the picture though.

Title article: Youtopia, Ch. 17
Date: 2008-05-14 10:43:00

Ahh, wow, this is great.
That Morgue just will never give in;
seems he's orchestrating something...
Haha, oh man, I have a huge hunch that
what Derek saw... well, wouldn't
want to spoil it... dunno why I'm mentioning
this, but just a few days ago I thought I saw
two boys making out (it was practically my
first time witnessing such a thing) and I
could not unpaste my sight from them, it
was weird, felt my insides start to float around...
Good job again! Great cliffhanger.

Title article: 23rd Century Digital Girl: Chapter 2
Date: 2008-05-14 09:45:55

It's pretty hard to even find organs to transplant, and I assume the level of deaths has decreased, since that other Nicole lived to be 101 in 2068 (by the way is it Nicole Kidman? heh), and this Nicole was able to be salvaged after her car 'accident' so where are these organs coming from? Genetically engineered? Probably, right?

One word sums this all up: BIONIC.

Agh, I could picture her flimsy body. Oh, and good
cliffhanger.

Will read the next one.

Title article: 23rd Century Digital Girl: Chapter 1
Date: 2008-05-14 09:27:37

Good.
Ha, what a cool title. That's what drew me to reading
it. Reminds me of a series I wrote on here (Tomo's
Guns), but I deleted it. Anyway, 'nuff about me, this was
not so bad. I am certainly curious enough to read
any continuations. I like all the robot, genetically
engineered parts, digital systems crap (all that
pretty sci-fi, futuristic stuff) so of course I had to read this. I think I will read the 2nd part now.

Title article: Predators of the Night
Date: 2008-05-14 09:10:53

Not too much to say... was descriptive and
quite vivid. For an eerie effect, I guess you
added the line, "The pack thirsts for warm blood."
But I was like, 'They aren't werewolves you know?'
But, be at ease, it was good. Still dunno
why this is written in poem format, but if
it weren't I probably would not have read it.
Also dunno if you'd like this to be digested as
symbolic or not.

Adieu.

Title article: My World
Date: 2008-05-14 08:58:23

K, this needn't have been a poem.
Read more like a narrative.
It was, to me, in no sense, poetic.
Luck.

Title article: Howard
Date: 2008-05-14 07:57:13

Was drawn into the story.
Good. Several grammar and spelling errors, but I
dealt. You did a decent job of taking us through the
mind of this cynic... this sexual predator. What you
came up with in the end was good, thought it was
suitable.

Title article: Youtopia, Ch. 16
Date: 2008-05-12 10:58:04

S-E-X... has the mere enunciation of the word
lost it's head-rotating effect? No, I don't think it
has quite yet (ha).
Hmm, I see where this is going... oi, how very
tragic.
This one seemed to lack a bit of the effort you
usually put into each chapter, but ya, lethargy
must be the explanation. No worries, still liked it.

Title article: Youtopia, Ch. 15
Date: 2008-05-12 10:37:30

Ah, sorry, I had read this already, but
couldn't comment. Thought I'd raise your
writing disposition to broiling degrees, well
at least to a full 100.
Ha, these new 'jock-type' characters are
something; good leverage.
I can hardly if ever find any 'holes' in your
storyline, you have everything under control;
you seem to fully understand the function of minor
characters, setting, plot, main characters, motif,
mood, etc.
Ah, what a stress-inducing hanger. Great job.

Title article: Messenger of Hope
Date: 2008-05-10 23:41:45

I thought this one would be different
from your other most recent poems, but
it isn't. it's a bit more subtle, but it is
expressing much of the same emotion
the others are... this is weird, but it's almost
as if you'd like this to be true, but it's not,
it's reaching towards breaking past some
hardship, but it is not succeeding...
it is really good though. as I've said
before, you are quite agile with pulling
stanzas together (and even in rhyming format).

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Date	Subject	Category	Hits
05/14/2008 08:49:48	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45186
05/06/2008 21:30:01	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45186
05/06/2008 21:24:03	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45186
05/06/2008 17:08:48	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45186
04/17/2008 16:01:24	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45186
04/17/2008 15:45:05	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45186
03/31/2008 09:24:47	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45186
03/27/2008 10:53:57	Re:The idea of poetry....	Off-Topic	712
03/22/2008 16:13:21	Re:1800's Thread	Off-Topic	16742
03/20/2008 21:44:15	Re:What's inside your noggin?	Off-Topic	45186

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Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 09/17/2008 12:50:21 so "A Twilight Sky" made it to your favorites. that's very hard to believe haha no, i'm kidding. i appreciate you adding it to your faves... but, it's a shame you didn't leave any comment
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/11/2008 18:05:37 You've earned points for quoting Easy Rider, by the way.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/09/2008 07:35:31 Edited By Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine) On: 09/09/2008 07:36:59 Now I get it. Well, I think it would make me a bad person, or maybe a liberator, who knows. Note: I remembered that liberator is being used pretty freely (GO REPUBLICANS) nowadays so I'll switch it to hero.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 09/08/2008 13:12:01 Easy Rider.
Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)	Created On: 09/07/2008 15:59:55 how's Juttabell doing?? i needed to sign this to tell you how great you are. keep it up!!
jesse (jesse2008) JUTTA TIME!	Created On: 08/03/2008 20:21:23 EKK, IT'S JUTTA, RUN! or as I like to call her Cell. Cell Motrin?
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 07/20/2008 07:45:29 Call me a spaz, do you. While you sport old lady glasses, you call me a spaz? While you toss verbal garbage at the king, you call me a spaz? Well. I like the glasses, anyway. Watch yo mouf.
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) tied up and gagged in someone's basement!	Created On: 07/05/2008 23:43:04 Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/06/2008 14:54:17 ahhh, you're red! red scares me because red reminds me of blood, which reminds me of revenge, which reminds me of christmas, which reminds me of serial killing hippies! who are you? who am I? i need to know these questions or i'm going to go insane...oopps, too late. I was going through my comments and i wanted to thank you for reading and leaving such good comment on my story, Dog. so, umm ... thanks
jesse (jesse2008) How rude of me	Created On: 07/05/2008 20:23:06 I should have signed your Profile Book, well I did it. YAY! You keep on writing Cell, yes I am calling you by your old name. Question where did that name come from, I know it's not from DBZ. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): ^^"cell" came from those itty bitty microscopic things.. the ones with a nucleus... i dunno, i like the sound of what makes up a cell, and the fact that a cell is the basic structural unit of all organisms. thank you for signing my profile book^^.
Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)	Created On: 06/18/2008 07:47:59 You forgot to add fanny pack to your about me. Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): No, I dumped you just a few days ago... don't you remember fanny pack? It was for a coin purse.