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Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^)
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Member Since 06/12/2007
Last Online 08/28/2008
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About Myself: Hangman.


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Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Aug 26, 2008Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 3Miscellaneous Stories 45
Aug 12, 2008Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 2Miscellaneous Stories 80
Jul 25, 2008Social Retard-Nation, Chapter 1Miscellaneous Stories 180
May 13, 2008Do You Love Me Still?Poetry 433
Apr 29, 2008Nutty AbbotPoetry 343
Mar 6, 2008InsideMiscellaneous Stories 383
Jan 25, 2008InsanePoetry 1381

Comments

Total number of comments: 340

Title article: Life As He Knew It.
Date: 2008-08-26 15:36:37

I'm assuming the whole deal with the beverages is alluding to the women they had going back and forth between them, I dunno; if that's the case the orange juice bit was humorous, as were other instances in this. But I wasn't enticed into going any further with this, in trying to decipher the rest. Dialog format's bad, but you know that.

Title article: To BELIEVE or NOT To BELIEVE
Date: 2008-08-18 12:27:18

This is very good. You lagged it a bit during your narration of what resulted for the Intellectual and Zombie in relation to their duties, but it didn't take away very from the core structure. It drove me to deep thought throughout; I found truth in all three character's initial takes on spirituality, and in the concluding idea. The Guru's method did in the end come through though, all three were finally able to think in unison (come to the same conclusion).  
Really liked this (story); very well-written. I enjoy complex subjects being told in simple, narrowed-down terms.

Title article: Just a Tease
Date: 2008-08-09 18:19:06

Highly entertaining twist. You did well in arranging the story for us to misconstrue until the shocking end.  
Assuming his teacher is not really a tease, him calling her that in his anger proves his immaturity (here, due to his young age); but I think this can be applied to adult relationships, how the love-stricken turned disillusioned can handle the blow immaturely with name calling or bubbling hatred...  
I liked this very much. Good job.

Title article: A Binding Constraint
Date: 2008-08-04 11:09:15

Beautiful. 
An uninteresting remark, but 
all that is necessary to say.

Title article: Peanut Butter and Doom
Date: 2008-07-28 13:03:47

"the brown cream fostering nuts on a smooth olive surface" was a near perfect description of it (a freshly-opened jar of peanut butter, I mean). It's not the humor I specifically enjoy, but your high points, I'd say, were the last paragraph and the 'author's note.'

Title article: Love From a Twelve Year Old
Date: 2008-07-28 12:39:29

It was a bit unsettling, even the font and color you chose to write this in (sort of pedophilic); simple misconception. Truthfully though, this isn't a story. No, setting, strong character development, plot, climax...  
So, I dunno, I'm at a loss.

Title article: A Free Gift For You
Date: 2008-07-28 11:32:29

Seems you don't know enough of the topic to make a convincing argument (that is assuming you were trying to make one). You didn't even have the truth to distort. But if you had, it's obvious you would have bent it to accommodate your ideologies, and that's just as questionable. And really, it projected more as an attack rather than a thought-provoking piece. What this needed is some clever, sharp-witted remarks.

Title article: Apples and Crows
Date: 2008-07-15 16:14:25

"In Portsmouth and Southsea" is overused.  
And it's beyond evident that you handpicked words just for the sake of rhyming. 
Personally didn't like the oddities. There's simply too much canvas when you write of the absurd.

Title article: Wordsmith
Date: 2008-06-25 16:19:05

Your personal efforts to be unconventional strongly come through in this. I like your writing because I don't have to ever offer any real constructive criticism. It's professional writing that I can just placidly enjoy. Excellent.

Title article: For you
Date: 2008-06-12 12:51:08

Ya ya, definitely stimulating! 
Really liked how it seemed that you were addressing us, the readers. In other words, the reader is almost made to believe that it was written especially for him/her (it's how it made me feel anyway, aha ^^;). This also had a Lewis Carol feel to it, especially towards the end. Nice.

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05/14/2008 08:49:48Re:What's inside your noggin?Off-Topic35812
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05/06/2008 21:24:03Re:What's inside your noggin?Off-Topic35812
05/06/2008 17:08:48Re:What's inside your noggin?Off-Topic35812
04/17/2008 16:01:24Re:What's inside your noggin?Off-Topic35812
04/17/2008 15:45:05Re:What's inside your noggin?Off-Topic35812
03/31/2008 09:24:47Re:What's inside your noggin?Off-Topic35812
03/27/2008 10:53:57Re:The idea of poetry....Off-Topic615
03/22/2008 16:13:21Re:1800's ThreadOff-Topic14830
03/20/2008 21:44:15Re:What's inside your noggin?Off-Topic35812

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jesse (jesse2008)

JUTTA TIME!
Created On: 08/03/2008 20:21:23

EKK, IT'S JUTTA, RUN! or as I like to call her Cell. Cell Motrin?

Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)

Created On: 07/20/2008 07:45:29

Call me a spaz, do you. While you sport old lady glasses, you call me a spaz? While you toss verbal garbage at the king, you call me a spaz?

Well.
I like the glasses, anyway. Watch yo mouf.

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

tied up and gagged in someone's basement!
Created On: 07/05/2008 23:43:04
Edited By Max Booth III (Zombie Punk) On: 07/06/2008 14:54:17


ahhh, you're red! red scares me because red reminds me of blood, which reminds me of revenge, which reminds me of christmas, which reminds me of serial killing hippies! who are you? who am I? i need to know these questions or i'm going to go insane...oopps, too late.

I was going through my comments and i wanted to thank you for reading and leaving such good comment on my story, Dog.

so, umm ... thanks


jesse (jesse2008)

How rude of me
Created On: 07/05/2008 20:23:06

I should have signed your Profile Book, well I did it. YAY! You keep on writing Cell, yes I am calling you by your old name. Question where did that name come from, I know it's not from DBZ.
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): ^^"cell" came from those itty bitty microscopic things.. the ones with a nucleus... i dunno, i like the sound of what makes up a cell, and the fact that a cell is the basic structural unit of all organisms.
thank you for signing my profile book^^.


Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)

Created On: 06/18/2008 07:47:59

You forgot to add fanny pack to your about me.
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): No, I dumped you just a few days ago... don't you remember? It was for a coin purse.

Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)

Created On: 06/13/2008 12:50:17


BATGIRL.
FANNYPACK.
CHOOSE ONE. OR BOTH.

Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): eh, i refuse to take this multiple-choice test.
it is bias.


Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)

Cali.
Created On: 06/12/2008 14:35:47

>>>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote (RE):
>>>>>>>>>>>>Yes, I'd love to be your fanny pack. In fact, can I be a fanny pack and your sidekick, at different times, when I'm in different moods? I implore you!
>>>>>>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote:
>>>>>>>>>>>>You are more like a fanny pack or a sidekick than a landlady.
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Funny, I remember the conversation going more like this:


>>>>>>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>>>>>>>Eh, I'm bored. Goodbye.

>>>>>>>>>> cookingWine wrote:
>>>>>>>>>>>>Of course Juttabell, and you know that they only go "peuw peuw" for you!

>>>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>>>> Fanny Pack (i.e. you), not unless you have some lasers inside you.

>>>>>>>>cookingWine wrote:
>>>>>>>>>> You are so gracious Juttabell, please, may I compliment you on your anatomy?

>>>>>CELL wrote:
>>>>>>>> Eh, sure you can be my fanny pack.

>>>>cookingWine wrote:
>>>>> Please Juttabell!


Mugen (Dirkin)

Australia-izzle
Created On: 06/05/2008 17:52:59

Just dropping a line! heres a cat =^;^=
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Ahaha, how cute! =^;^=

Nunyo Bidness (cookingWine)

Created On: 05/28/2008 13:53:08

JEZEBEL!
SHUT UP!
YOU STINK!

Er.
Forgive me. Superman was overtaken by the hulk of bad insults.
Juttabell, write something new.
Feedback from Jutta Motrin (Juttabell^^): Juttabell, heh, that's so cute^^;
I will write something new in due time; I'm swamped.


Sorrow Is My Mask (resistanceisfreedom)

Created On: 05/24/2008 08:08:22

how sweet. Ai Shite Imasu right back!!


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