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Member Since	10/13/2008
Last Online	01/06/2009
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About Myself:

Born 1962 in North Carolina USA
Now live in Michigan USA
Firewall Engineer
World of Warcraft addict
Prefer Fantasy and Sci-Fi but will read almost anything.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Jan 5, 2009	Rogue chronicles, Chapter 4	Miscellaneous Stories	27
Dec 30, 2008	Rogue Chronicles, Chapter 3	Miscellaneous Stories	43
Nov 20, 2008	Rogue Chronicles - Part 2, Chapter 2	Miscellaneous Stories	43
Oct 31, 2008	The Rogue Chronicles - Part 1, Chapter 1	Adventure	73

Comments

Total number of comments: 19

Title article: The Adventures Of Pugswallow, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-12-15 05:45:03

A fun read. I like the bit about light not necessarily meaning good. I can't help but wonder what kind of difficulties Allana is going to get Pugs into.

Title article: An Unwelcome Encounter
Date: 2008-12-15 05:25:48

This was well written. I can see this as a stand alone story but it works much better as a lead-in to a bigger story. I look forward to reading more.

Title article: Rogue Chronicles - Part 2, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-11-20 13:00:51

I'm not real happy with these first 2 chapters, but they are basically an introduction. The following chapters are much better, or so I believe anyway.

Title article: The Little Girl that wasn't there (Finale), Chapter 4
Date: 2008-11-03 07:28:05

Nice wrap up, but I hope it's just the beginning and not the end. Keep it up!

Title article: THE LITTLE GIRL THAT WASN'T THERE, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-11-03 07:21:30

Just read all 3 parts you have posted so far. I disaggree with the others about breaking it up; a short story can definely be more than 5 or 6 paragraphs. It's a good read so far. Keep it up.

Title article: **HOME** Chapter 1
Date: 2008-10-30 11:44:53

I enjoyed the story. I agree that the jargon can be a bit distracting though. Maybe try using it early on to establish character and then lighten up on it to make the rest of the read earlier. Maybe it's just me but I had no idea the narrator was female until the ending. Good job.

Title article: The Death
Date: 2008-10-30 11:16:18

Good storyline but the grammar threw me off. Also personalize the character a little more. Maybe give him a name. Maybe give him a few personality traits. Make us end up seeing Fred the Grim Reaper with the crooked grin or gold tooth! Personally I had no problem with the jump from the distant past to present day. Good work.

Title article: being a man
Date: 2008-10-22 11:25:46

Interesting theme but the story was very hard to follow. The word choice distracted me from the storyline. Reminds of some professional writers from the early 1900's but I found them hard to follow too. Keep trying though.

Title article: Elijah
Date: 2008-10-22 10:21:17

Excellent story. It was well written, had a nice flow, and was very compelling. I also liked the sense of weary repetition. I look forward to more of your stories.

Title article: WHEN DREAMS COME TRUE
Date: 2008-10-22 10:07:37

Nicely done. I have no trouble believing what a six year old can do. When I was seven, I was cutting open my dad's shotgun shells to get gunpowder to try to make a rocket. I sometimes wonder how my friends and I survived to adulthood. Thanks for the memories!

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