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mike counselman (gtmike)
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About Myself: I am a 52 year old contractor with a lifelong love of books and writing. I usually write what I like to read and as a consequence I have a nice stack of rejection letters. Although most are encouaging. Any input is appreciated.

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Sep 14, 2008Digital ParanoiaScience Fiction 202
Sep 11, 2008Bee WarsHumor 382
Aug 21, 2008High WaterMiscellaneous Stories 169
Aug 20, 2008crazytymeHorror 249
Aug 20, 2008Going HomeMiscellaneous Stories 401
Aug 17, 2008Larval StageScience Fiction 198
Aug 15, 2008MercsScience Fiction 162
Aug 12, 2008Halloween's ChildHorror 408

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Total number of comments: 74

Title article: My Classmate, My Bestfriend, My Love, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-11-01 18:54:46
more flow
Good beginning. A bit stacatto in reading and cadence. Maybe something to do with sentence length. Good foreshadowing and raised alot of questions. Pretty good, I'll keep reading. GTMike

Title article: You Want What?
Date: 2008-09-30 22:14:10
Getting weird
Okay, this is the third story of yours that I've read and the comments seemed to inadvedantly fit together. I guess if you actually had this job, daydreaming would be mandatory.Still reading.GTMike

Title article: Winning The Frog Lottery
Date: 2008-09-30 22:00:09
Coincidince?
Okay, maybe it's happenstance that I read your trailer story and the gum/lotto story next but I hope you have a job that lets you daydream alot because it seems that the simple things in life keep waking up the writer in you that wants to know more.(Whoa, huge run on sentence). Anyway, I usually advise beginning writers not to experiment with style, but you've got away with it twice.(I think the shortness of the stories helped.) So far, I'm intrigued enough to keep reading. GTMike

Title article: Come Get Your Trailer
Date: 2008-09-29 21:36:30
illegals
Way to turn an every day annoyance into an interesting story. I'd bet dollars to donuts that the driver and anyone else in the tow vehicle were illegal aliens. We've given away the construction industry and things like this are just collateral damage. GTMike

Title article: The Longest Walk
Date: 2008-09-29 21:24:25
flesh out
Okay, I have a tendency to write long, but I think this could have easily doubled in length. When I read an apocolyptic battle between life and death, I expect Thunder and lightning. Great scenes and narative that could have built and grown. Think Wagner and rewrite this as an epic. Really good outline. Now finish it! GTMike

Title article: The Carrier
Date: 2008-09-28 20:38:02
scattered.
I liked your story. Good imagry, believable characters, nice dialog, but your transitions between scenes were abupt and comfusing. It's a pretty linear story, so give us a bit more of a transition between scenes. Otherwise very good. GTMike P.S. Thanks for wading through my long story Mercs, and for your comment.

Title article: The Waitress
Date: 2008-09-15 23:55:48
Zig-Zag
Wow, that certainly took an unexected turn. Well written, good dialog, original premise. You don't often see women as murderers, but a good depictin of the psychos out there. GTMike

Title article: Hoodlyfe Chronicles, Chapter 2
Date: 2008-09-15 20:08:11
Not exactly original
Hey La'Tronzo, not alot of originality here either. Just another violent piece, trying to be shocking and merely glorifying dumb-ass gang bangers.Hard to read with no paragraphs, run on sentences and poor spelling and punctuation. Hopefully your going somewhere more creative than this with the rest. "Bee Wars" was non-fiction. Before you judge my creativity, read more of my work. I've read all of yours, and so far I'm not impressed.GTMike

Title article: Tip the Option
Date: 2008-09-13 21:53:35
Good
Well written, but hard to believe that he was suddenly aware of tipping protocol. Maybe could have had him consistenly cheap instead of a sudden realization. A waitress friend said that the only people who don't tip have never worked in a service industry.GTMike

Title article: Room 1135
Date: 2008-09-13 21:41:22
compelling
Very well done. Pulled me along and kept me in the story. Good narative,good suspense, nice forshadowing. I'm fairly new to the site and figuring what writers I like. Will definently read more of yours.GTMike

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Warwick, RI
 Created On: 09/15/2008 21:36:54
Thanks gtmike for the well-constructed comments and expertise on weaponry. You are helping to polish my tales and I really appreciate it. I know the importance of factual accuracy in telling a story so any time my gaffes can be set right that is a very good thing!

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