Cassandra's House, Chapter 1

CASSANDRA'S HOUSE Chapter One...

Echoes of the previous Life.

(my old writing, I wonder if there are visible...
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About Myself: I started writting short stories about 4yrs ago. My two boys and I would take week-long hiking trips into VERY remote locations, and they always wanted me to tell them a campfire story before turning in for the night. Many of the stories were eventually shared with others and I was encouraged to keep writting.

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DateTitleCategoryHits
Jul 9, 2008Nothing Is EasyHumor 256
Jul 8, 2008M-T Barrel BarMiscellaneous Stories 202

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Total number of comments: 24

Title article: Upstream Looking Down (Completed)
Date: 2008-08-09 02:59:21

Your delivery of the story is good. I kept reading to see what was going to happen. You should liven up the content more. Are you trying to write a biography or an "adventure" story? I'll be looking forward to see where you can take this.

Title article: image
Date: 2008-08-09 02:46:32

Well that was kinda strange. I read you explanation and alot more of it made sense, but in a totaly different way than I thought. You know how you read something and you start to build a path and story line in your head as to where something will go? I had that right up until I read your explanation, then it went away. This was very interesting. Thanks for the read.

Title article: M-T Barrel Bar
Date: 2008-07-11 06:16:12
Clarification
Sharing his "final thought" with his friends would be the bits of grey matter that landed on and around them. So no he never saw the cops or really went home. His mind created that as a reality for him.

Title article: Today Is The Day
Date: 2008-07-11 06:07:29

Nicely done. I liked the change of perspective from the norm. It could have shown more of his impending doom before he realized a glimmer of hope from the cross beside him. It was well done for what it is, but I could see it twice as long and five times the impact.

Title article: Diary of a Fat Girl
Date: 2008-07-11 05:57:22
Pretty Good
I though the characters in this story were very realistic. I can see a few of my friends in the rolls you have created. Guys like me have spent many nights thinking of ways to remove out foot from our mouths, or our heads from our asses, for letting our little head do most of the thinking. I liked it a lot.

Title article: Frantic, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-07-11 05:49:56
Roller Coaster
I won't reiterate the mechanics issues, it looks like you have plent of help in that category.  
What i will say is that the staggered/broken thought through-out the story "ADDED" to the broken psyche of the character. I felt that Frantic/Christian had as much control of who was speaking/acting out as the reader has in following along. This whole story was a thrill ride for me as the characters fought for contol of my attention. I loved it.

Title article: A Something Indecent Interview
Date: 2008-07-10 22:57:31

Man you are kind of twisted arn't you? This was really diferent. Very funny, I liked it alot. I guess I'll have to check out this story about your balls. Have you checked out my true story of my vasectomy? Keep up the good work.

Title article: A Mom's View of Summer
Date: 2008-07-10 19:02:45
A+
This is really fun. I work nights and I can feel you pain. Try to sleep with that going on all day. I assume that the kids a quiet when I'm at work (they are asleep), but the never fail to wake up at 8:00 in the morning when its my turn. Good job. Thanks for the giggles.

Title article: Birth of the White Buffalo
Date: 2008-07-10 18:52:19

This is a truly good story. I have some Native American blood running through my veins and I thought you did this story well. I liked the descriptive images through the love scene. I thought they were very taste-fully done. I liked it a lot. Thanks for sharing it.

Title article: Falling Out With George
Date: 2008-07-10 06:13:45
Great narative
I have cats myself and can really relate to the royal nature of a beast that feels we are put on this earth to serve them. And I spent a day and a half removing hair from my teeth after I bit my loving furballs ear for tast testing my arm after a shower with different soap than usual. Good work and keep it comming.

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