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sarah (aeden4416)
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About Myself: ello dere!
well lets just say i have a sick sense of humor. i love reading beckett and stoppard and that sort of thing and it comes out a little bit in my writing. i absolutely loath grammar and spelling so there are lots of typos in my stories. anyway, thats about it thanks for stopping by!

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Published Short Stories

 
DateTitleCategoryHits
Sep 20, 2008Blue RoomHorror 156
Sep 10, 2008Confessions of a Teenage Psyche CaseHumor 194

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Total number of comments: 17

Title article: Tell Me That You Love Me
Date: 2008-09-21 20:00:41

i absolutely loved the second one. beautiful and sincere. had a sort of innocence that you don't really see much these days. the first part was very good, but the second is much more my style.

Title article: Grizzled Old Warrior
Date: 2008-09-19 12:19:28
perty good
pretty good. one of the best westerns i've read in a bit actually. as far as suggestions go, i really liked the overall tone, but maybe add a little more characterization? why does he feel the need to be the best and all that jazz. overall though, it was a very enjoyable read.  
keep up the good work

Title article: Highly Decorated
Date: 2008-08-29 10:45:50
very nice
wondefully done. beautiful personification, loved the satire. my favorite part was the standing for parliament bit. hilarious! simply amazing, i really loved this one

Title article: From Stagnant Water
Date: 2008-08-24 16:56:06
very nice
short sweet and to the point. 
 
"Soon enough an entire platoon had engaged me swooping in for quick aggressive attacks" 
 
i liked the use of the word platoon. works very well.  
 
it had its moments of being very funny, but for me, i liked it for the imagery

Title article: A Static Reality
Date: 2008-08-24 16:51:11
beautiful
what else is there to say? beautiful word usage, beautiful concept. i loved the rhyme scheme. there is such a fine line between a rhyme that unites and one that is forced and breaks the poem. keep it up, really amazing

Title article: HENPECKED HUSBAND
Date: 2008-08-24 16:47:18
flow
poetry for me is all about the flow from one idea to the next. the rhyme was, needless to say, very forced, and it didnt really go anywhere through the whole thing. could be a good idea, needs alot more style

Title article: Upstream Looking Down (Completed)
Date: 2008-08-10 22:54:57
good
sad, but written in a calming way if that makes any sense to anyone but me. a little more development would have been nice, but overall i thought it was quite good. keep writing and i'll keep reading!

Title article: The Beast and the Wicked Witch
Date: 2008-08-10 22:49:55
fun to read
i thought it was fun to read if nothing more. a little abstract and hard to follow at the beginning, but it came together and it was just a fun story to read

Title article: Bicycle
Date: 2008-08-10 22:35:40
heart wrenching
Very emotional. it made me tear up a little bit. this is one of my favorites out of what i have read. i love raw emotion and this is a perfect example. keep up the amazing work!

Title article: The Elephant Dance, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-08-10 22:15:57
not too shabby
i liked it. the ending threw me a little bit. i'm not sure if it is that i didnt like it or that it just came a little bit to soon. the elephant was pretty boss though, i have to admit.

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