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Date	Title	Category	Hits
Sep 20, 2008	Blue Room	Horror	561
Sep 10, 2008	Confessions of a Teenage Psyche Case	Humor	723

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Title article: Open Your Eyes
Date: 2008-07-08 23:09:56

nice
i'd like to see more of this character, maybe another story with him? very well developed showing a soldiers remorse for the crimes he has committed, but brings in an extra level with the wife.

beautiful

Title article: Life is Beau-ti-ful
Date: 2008-07-05 14:30:37

a little bit mixed
i thought the overall message of the story was done very well, but there were a few awkward parts that didnt seem quite as realistic as the message it was putting up

Title article: Today Is The Day
Date: 2008-07-05 14:19:18

very nice. i dont think i've read anything so detailed from that point of view. excellent subject to write on. i've personally always been fascinated with the idea that the criminals redemption came only from condemnation

Title article: The Darkness of Daylight
Date: 2008-07-05 14:12:04

pure
i thought the raw emotion of the story was beautifully conveyed. the world is a tough place for anyone and i was very impressed by this snapshot of it.

i wouldn't change the content of the story at all, but if i could make one suggestion i would say that there are a few places where a slightly more vivid word could have been used

over all though, pretty wicked

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