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The distant door closed shut behind him with a click....

The Adventures Of Pugswallow, Chapter 1

Pugswallow sat in a mud puddle popping bubbles and...

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About Myself:

Student, writer, hooker killer. I'm educated but im vulgar, i'm cynical but optimistic, i'm blunt but articulate, i'm an asshole but I have a good heart, im disliked by many but really really loved by a few. I wouldn't want it any other way. I was introverted in my youth, and very extroverted in my adolescence. I have been a geek and a jock, a nerd and a frat boy. I have a twisted sense of humor and i love horror. My influences are Chuck Palahniuk, H.P. Lovecraft, Kurt Vonnegut and Ray Bradbury. I love my schools UC Riverside and Arizona State University.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Jul 9, 2008	Confession	Horror	260
Jul 8, 2008	The Gift	Miscellaneous Stories	193
Jul 2, 2008	Corruption	Horror	218
Jul 1, 2008	Growth	Horror	633
Jul 1, 2008	The Weight	Horror	195

Comments

Title article: The Gift
Date: 2008-07-08 02:18:19

existentialism
ever read any existentialist philosphy? are you familiar with Camus, Sartre, Nietzsche and the absurd?

Title article: The Darkness of Daylight
Date: 2008-07-07 15:41:27

the third sentence is a long run-on. very emotional story, I like the stream of consciousness. you do a good job of conveying the character's emotions

Title article: THE SHADOW OF THE FALLEN, Chapter 0
Date: 2008-07-07 15:36:42

the dialogue is a little stilted, it sounds somewhat fake. some parts are a little confusing also, specially when the shooting is going on.

Title article: Tired Avenue Dirkin/Anna Devine
Date: 2008-07-03 14:48:45

interesting
wow this poem was amazing. i'm not necessarily a fan of poetry but this flowed beautifully and continued making sense at that. excellent job.

Title article: gone was the girl
Date: 2008-07-03 14:46:08

hmm
wow this is a little sad considering the occasion. It is meant to celebrate childhood or to mourn it?

Title article: What Kind Of God?
Date: 2008-07-03 14:39:35

wow
i was floored by your story. I have to admitt that i am thoroughly impressed. there is a plot hole though in that the first time he checks the revolver there are two bullets, then he checks it again and there are three bullets. I also think that the ambuguity of the thing approaching is better than you having to explain exactly what it is. Excellent job.

Title article: The Spiders and Johnny Bailes
Date: 2008-07-02 13:31:54

great start
excellent start, captured my attention immediately. A few run on sentences but nothing some review wont clear up.

Title article: Corruption
Date: 2008-07-02 13:28:00

thanks
thank you all for reading and commenting, sorry phil, can't compromise with you on that buddy, to tone down and censor my thought process would be like fucking with a condom. not my cup of tea.

Title article: Building Steam with a Grain of God
Date: 2008-07-02 02:58:01

good work
great poem, needs a little work on structure in order to flow a little more smoothly but overall it kept me entertained regardless of its lenght.

Title article: Something Cat
Date: 2008-07-02 02:46:51

good story
this was very well written and a little scary in some parts. I thoroughly enjoyed it. thank you for sharing.