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Member Since	06/15/2008
Last Online	08/21/2008
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About Myself:

Discovered the bug for writing after helping my daughter do a homework assignment where she had to write a story of some 1000 words. After I was finished with it(daddy's lil girl)I gave it to her to take to school.

Live on the east coast in the good ol USofA.

I like to read, so I should get around to yours eventually.

Stories

Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Aug 20, 2008	Punishment	Miscellaneous Stories	78
Aug 20, 2008	Nights Journey	Miscellaneous Stories	64
Aug 19, 2008	Apparition of Justice	Horror	97
Aug 16, 2008	Better Day Tomorrow	Miscellaneous Stories	70
Aug 15, 2008	How Far	Poetry	92
Aug 14, 2008	A Freak of Nature	Miscellaneous Stories	67
Aug 14, 2008	A Good Day for a Bad Mistake	Miscellaneous Stories	89
Aug 12, 2008	Della Bridge	Poetry	70
Aug 12, 2008	An Unfolding Nightmare	Poetry	107
Aug 9, 2008	House Detective	Mystery	170
Aug 6, 2008	The Butcher of Barrios (part cuatro)	Miscellaneous Stories	107
Aug 5, 2008	Racism has a Color	Poetry	139
Aug 5, 2008	The Butcher of Barrios (part tres)	Miscellaneous Stories	93
Aug 3, 2008	The Butcher of Barrios (part dos)	Miscellaneous Stories	111
Aug 1, 2008	The Butcher of Barrios	Miscellaneous Stories	305
Jul 29, 2008	Visions of a Tortured Mind	Miscellaneous Stories	209
Jul 29, 2008	A Life Complete	Miscellaneous Stories	168
Jul 15, 2008	Day of Revelation	Miscellaneous Stories	471
Jul 8, 2008	Days of End (Mans past...Mans future ), Chapter 3	Science Fiction	298
Jun 22, 2008	Days of End (a journey of man)chapter 1 & 2	Science Fiction	534

Books

Title	Date
Twisted Tales and other Odd Ramblings	Aug 5, 2008

Comments

Total number of comments: 329

Title article: Punishment
Date: 2008-08-21 17:33:54

Thanks chaabuk for that meaningful reveiw...means alot. Also, to everybody,,,and I promise you wont see this again.

Title article: the disquiet fall
Date: 2008-08-21 17:30:31

This wasnt bad,,like it. neck neckt neked...it all good.

Title article: "The Lesson"
Date: 2008-08-21 17:22:14

ouch
Ah man,,,I wanted a (big bang)of an ending...my attempt at humor. This actually had me rolling with laughter picturing everything you described, and im a kind hearted man. This could actually happen and im sure it has,,,not to you i hope. I liked this, it was a fun read though a bit graphic but with a sense of humor in an odd sort of way.

Title article: The Jesus Caravan
Date: 2008-08-21 17:03:29

five all the way.
This was a good story with a very discriptive setting. But as I see from your other work this is the way you right which is great. But unlike '4her' this ending didn't grab me as much...kinda just ended, if you know what I mean. Got a chuckle from the word shag discribing sex..Austin Powers baby.

Long...this story is worth reading but would be better suited in 3 chapters for this site...people here are looking for a quick read in my opinion and might stear clear from anything to long.

Also, I was left scratching from the beginning when you mentioned a blackout but never brought it into the story...blackout are scary in their on right. Plus, as a reader Im not really sure what a pulse cannon exactly is, somehow you should have explained what it is and does, but I assume it is a bad mother type of weapon.
Alot of dialogue of them bickering could have been cut down in size. This is not meant to be a bad review, I loved this story and the detail. Just a few things to look at.

Title article: They live amongst us
Date: 2008-08-20 12:36:24

Great touch at the end. I throughly enjoyed this story, glad I took the time. Thought it was well delivered and looking forward to seeing more of your stuff on here.

Good job.

Title article: Him
Date: 2008-08-20 12:00:47

This lacked the intense factor. Clones are a good subject for a story however, and your off to a good but slow start. Need to elaborate more with discribing the setting so the reader can relate better.

Think your idea is a good one. Just for me however, when I read a story I need to be drawn into that world.

Maybe the complete version will make this review seem pointless.

Title article: The Necromancer
Date: 2008-08-20 11:50:36

good
This was really good but it ended to quickly for Zardo. This should have been made longer with Zardo following the strangers around learning who they were,,,cause we have no clue as the reader. It appears they are time travelers, or space travelers...but one can't be sure.

I thought it was written really well how Zardo approach them, but again,,it just came to a quick ending with questions still unanswered.

Title article: A Life Complete
Date: 2008-08-20 10:51:32

Thanks Dasgupta and everybody for taking time out. This also hits home for me as well, as we placed my grandfather in a home as he was dying from cancer...not aggressive when we submitted him. Remembering him inspired this story.
Thanks again for those commenting on my stories.

Title article: Eulogy to a Frank-fArt-er, Chapter 1
Date: 2008-08-20 10:40:45

somewhere in the world a man has this na
This story didn't even have 20 paragraphs,,not sure what dozens is talking bout.

I didn't think this was bad, but was it suppose to be funny, didn't notice the catagory when clicking on it. Thought it was more insightful the humorous.

I guess ill sum it up by saying

Interesting.

Title article: Crash
Date: 2008-08-20 10:28:12

I liked this. It had a few flaws the way I see it, but it didn't take away from the story. For instance..The time it takes for a craft to plummet is quick, to quick for crew members to have blead to death from broken shards. But then who can say, being aliens and all.

Me being pety I suppose...but regardless, great visual from the aliens point of view.

Damn, another idea I wish I had come up with.

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Forum

Last 10 Forum Posts

Date	Subject	Category	Hits
08/20/2008 19:43:42	Punishment	Off-Topic	160
08/17/2008 19:21:04	Re:Any Nightmare Before Christmas fans out there?	Off-Topic	516
08/17/2008 19:14:02	Re:Who kicks butt? Fall Out Boy or Green Day?	Off-Topic	547
08/16/2008 13:54:10	re-post	Off-Topic	52
08/15/2008 16:01:46	Re:The Ramen Revolution	Off-Topic	454
08/14/2008 18:09:26	Re:Do you, have you, did you....BLAH BLAH	Off-Topic	785
08/14/2008 18:06:07	Re:Proclaim Your Royalty	Off-Topic	197794
08/14/2008 17:53:28	Re:Do you, have you, did you....BLAH BLAH	Off-Topic	785
08/14/2008 15:15:26	Re:Proclaim Your Royalty	Off-Topic	197794
08/14/2008 15:00:59	Re:Proclaim Your Royalty	Off-Topic	197794

Connection

r.e.potter (r.e.potter)'s connections

Lisa (antheerr)

Project 30 (Project 30)

David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump)

JJ Tyler (JJtyler)

Michelle Huff (allmine)

Dipankar Dasgupta (d.dasgupta)

Philip Neale (philneale1952)

Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)

Guestbook

Name	Entry
Christian Wright (The 13th) Right at the bog and next to the old oak tree.	Created On: 08/07/2008 14:28:21 So when you gonna put out the marge (sorry forgot name)story. I'm looking for some good material to steal.
David Neve (Tarhead Mugwump) hill country texas	Created On: 07/29/2008 20:08:05 i've gotta say, cause i'm funny that way, i really miss your other stories. i, as you know, am blessed with adhd - which means that i have a very fast refresh rate. i used to really enjoy popping in on your page and rereading your work. although your stories now are no doubt very well written and it is very easy to see that you have matured as a writer even in the short time you have been here - i really miss the whimsical side of russell. i know it's a total pain, believe me, i'm still trying to slide my old stories back on my page - but i sure would love to see your old stuff back here again. that's all - carry on! and write on!
Amie Kerlin (lemon) under the bed	Created On: 07/21/2008 16:04:12 nice monkey, don't spank him too hard
Michelle Huff (allmine)	Created On: 07/21/2008 14:25:33 I could say a bad word, but there are minors around!!!
Philip Neale (philneale1952) Derbyshire, England	Created On: 07/18/2008 07:10:48 Edited By Philip Neale (philneale1952) On: 07/18/2008 07:12:05 Bloody hell mate, forgot to sign you in. Got your ticket yet? Phil
Michelle Huff (allmine) I know where I want to be...	Created On: 07/17/2008 06:06:57 What happened to the sexy pic of you? What am I supposed to drool over now?
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 07/09/2008 21:20:27 Oi! What happened to Punishment?
Max Booth III (Zombie Punk)	Created On: 07/06/2008 18:00:32 hey! puting bags over your head is a very dangerous habit! even paper like the kind you have on yours. why? well termites live in those things and they might mistake your head as a chunk of wood and have a feast upon your flesh. that was what happened to capone, after all.
Michelle Huff (allmine) Here and There	Created On: 07/02/2008 10:50:28 Have to be the first one to leave a comment...It's the law!